All Comments on 'Twinning'

Great first story. Good word crafting and sexy plot line. Way too many wrong words, ones that spell out legitimate word but not the one you meant, too not to, etc. Grammarly won't catch those, but a careful out loud proofing will. Volunteer Proof Readers are a dime a dozen on Lit. I would be happy to do so for your next effort, which I hope will be very soon.

Great story. Sexy. The boys didn’t force their way on Audrey, yet they got her excited about what might come later. She wants it. Let her take the lead.