All Comments on 'Twins in College Ch. 01'

Could you name the characters, please? It was really annoying after awhile of always reading 'big brother' and 'little sister.' Overall though, a most enjoyable read. Steve

good story. I don't recall where the orignal refernce of Sailor Moon occured besides saying usagi t-shirt, not everyone will understand the reference. And names would be nice too but still good.

Might have been a good story. However you took so long to get past the character development, and hinting what was to come that the excitement died aborning. Did anything ever actually happen, or did they just sit around savoring how much they were in love? Who knows? By that time, I was in danger of falling asleep when the door bell rang for the pizza.

... to be fulfilled. The language, though correct, was far too flowery. And I've no idea who Usagi might be, or what mamoru means - so, please don't be so 'smart'.

And did I get a clue that they are fraternal twins?

Lukas

This story could have been much better, you spent too long developing the characters and the setting. I actually had to FORCE myself to finish reading it. Sorry, but you need to work on your erotica skills.

Rather lengthy setup, although it does tie in your previous Incest/Taboo stories with Twins in College. I hope the lengthy setup will be justified by a lengthy series.

Great opening for the series i loved the sailor moon ref but it would have really thrilled me to see syaoran and sakura used. I wish my half sister was like that

i thought this was so romantic...off to read chapter 2

But to anyone looking to this story for ideas. ADD MORE DIALOGUE. It's as simple as that. This story was adequately written, however, that any extra character development before their relationship heightened would have been superfluous. Regardless, this author has some good series of stories.

A beautiful start to a series

I can understand some of the criticism your getting with this story but overall not too bad. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Beautiful start to this story, will be interesting to see where it ends up. I thought this was so romantic...off to read chapter 2