All Comments on 'Twisted Sister Ch. 01'

...switches tenses and no build up/tease. Try again.

Twins often share a bond others can't understand. I found the story very sexy and hot, keep it up..........

Twins share a bond that others can't understand. I found the story very sweet and sexy.........

Above all else, the missing ingredient is PUNCTUATION! Your story is unreadable. Go back to school!

Want more...I've read both chapters...want more..need more!

whats with the switching back and forth between 1st & 3rd person? also, your punctuation is terrible, and its very distracting from the story. you have a decent start here; i suggest you hire a decent editor to help you.

for fucks sake! Learn english before you write a story -.-