All Comments on 'Twisted Sister Ch. 01'

for fucks sake! Learn english before you write a story -.-

whats with the switching back and forth between 1st & 3rd person? also, your punctuation is terrible, and its very distracting from the story. you have a decent start here; i suggest you hire a decent editor to help you.

Want more...I've read both chapters...want more..need more!

Above all else, the missing ingredient is PUNCTUATION! Your story is unreadable. Go back to school!

Twins share a bond that others can't understand. I found the story very sweet and sexy.........

Twins often share a bond others can't understand. I found the story very sexy and hot, keep it up..........

...switches tenses and no build up/tease. Try again.