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MaonaighMaonaighover 3 years ago
Needs an editor

A pleasant little erotic inter-species fantasy, unfortunately marred by a few errors, poor punctuation etc. For instance: Harci "...set of..." the device---should read she "...set off..." And the explosion "...shredded her close..."---should read "...shredded her clothes..." As I suggested, an enjoyable little story but you could do with a good editor.

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