All Comments on 'Two for One'

Learn to write. Get an editor. (Both!)

It's not that the story concepts are bad; it's that the delivery is horrible. And that is said without addressing the obvious flaw in presenting the second story.

Don't give up, but do get help.

-- KVK

sorry guys with the formatting...I didnt realize it was dupped and smushed together...

For those of you who are my faithful readers, you know this never happens, and for that I am sorry. for those who have read only this story, please dont judge based on this flawed sumbission...Feel free to take a look at several other of stories, and you will see the difference...

Love always, Alexis

Hey: if I wanted English lessons I would attend universtity.

What you deliver Alexis is hot hot sex. Which is what Literotica is all about.

Well done