All Comments on 'Two Hundred Dollars Ch. 11'

Awesome as always. CZ

I would usually not like a story going this long without them becoming lovers. But they have such an interesting relationship forming that it is really compelling to read. Thanks.

They've only really had a relationship (of a kind) for about a month, so it doesn't seem like it's that long, in practical, real-world terms.

Anxious to see what happens next!!!

I just saw this story today, and I burned through all of your written chapters already. I'm enjoying the slow burn of the relationship's progression, it's very well crafted.

Wonderful 🙂Finally she found the courage to go public. And the library is such a good place.

The book wouldn't do, a ruler would be better. Obviously. But the hand is much more personal. That's probably a thing she should discover. 🤔

I am loving this series. Found it yesterday and have devoured it eagerly. I love the characters and the gradual build up. Can't wait to see where you go next .

My advice would be to make sure each segment somehow advances their relationship. I was less enthusiastic about this installment than others because it seemed less clear about its focus in relation to the whole sequence--after a second reading I think it's better than my first impression, but I do think the whole storyline could lose momentum if it isn't showing Bailey and Kent learning about their relationship in the next section. I've been really enjoying the story and would really hope to see it tightly constructed.

And while I'm sounding off, I'd suggest keeping Laura in a secondary role. Stories on Literotica can get really schlocky when they focus less on the humans involved and instead try to get every possible combination of characters somehow having sex. Don't do that to Kent and Bailey! Laura could still play an important role, but shouldn't be in the spotlight. [Okay - mini-rant over... 🙄]

Somehow, I feel that the next spanking in an odd location should involve Laura again.

Not necessarily as a participant but at least as a witness.

Though a participating Laura wouldn't be bad in my eyes.

I am pretty sure it would give Bailey into another emotional rollercoaster, which she can only overcome if in the end she stands a tiny bit more bold or took more spanks as Laura. :D

I think we already had the thought of the girls to spank each other?

I can imagine Laura to spank Bailey and vice versa in a kind of experiment or even up to a contest again ... which out male hero would win anyway :D

By the time the debt runs down to zero... They should be datung.

"...should involve Laura again."

Of course! While she isn't universally enjoyed, she's a catalyst for certain events and forms of progress.

"Stories on Literotica can get really schlocky when they focus less on the humans involved and instead try to get every possible combination of characters somehow having sex."

The enjoyable part about this story is getting to the ridiculous places without letting it feel schlocky. Hide and seek could have been silly, but I think it worked. See what you think of Ch 12. :) Should be up soon.

I’ve not enjoyed a spanking series in such a long time but this is a masterpiece in the making, thank you xtorch :)

A nice balance between intimacy and "just a deal". Between private and public. Well done :)

How about another public place again?

What other places would they visit together?

It is not The Art of Spanking but I really would like to see it as a Graphic Novel

Yes, I'd love to see that, too.

But drawing naked people, or clothed people for that matter, is not in my present skill set.

Can we have more crazy public-but-not-so-public locations again, please?

They always add another level of thrill to it.

Bailey and Kent are being so creative with this process and the passion keeps building between them. I admire your creativity and how you keep the story uncluttered. I can't wait to read more. Thanks.

This is really a Fun story. Definitely keeping my attention!!!!!!!

loved Bailey's behavior in the first set of spankings in this chapter

Loving this story! I'm going to guess that we will see a little more of Laura's emotional take on this. If we don't I'll be a little surprised.