All Comments on 'Uncle Dave's Midlife Crisis Ch. 07'

Have never read this sort of story before. Made me horny as hell.

I really love the story line, it makes for a good read. However in the last part they were in the moms room playing with each other, then when the sister comes home from work now mom and daughter are crashed in her room. I'm sure it was an oversight but your editors should pick that sort of thing up. I would love to help you proof your stories. You have a good ability to suck the reader in, with some refinements you would be great.

Polly

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A good story getting spoilt by unreal elements.

Apart from your spell checker you have Jackie having just lost her virginity getting a 4" diameter dildo inside her. Without any complaints!

I know it's fiction but keep it realistic to gain maximum eroticism.