by amasterfound
It's Only a Dream, But I Dream This Naughty Dream ! ! !
I loved the story !! I get fucked and spanked every night !! I love the feel of cocks in my pussy !!
Eh, could be better. Didn't particularly like it, but maybe it's just not my kind of story.
very nice story i love it because i have an story very similer to it
A good stroke story. The sex was hot and neat. Can't wait to read the rest.
Loved this one as well as the other one. Looking forward to Chapter 3.
I loved the way the story started and continued ,wvwn with the right amount of details (except for the cocksize) but I didn't like being left hanging. Please post the second chapter so I cam raise your score!!
You show much more promise then your boyfriend. You've actually developed a coherent story and I think, with some practice, you'll be turning out some really good stories.
One thing I would comment on is the way you drop in details. The dick size one in particular totally broke the flow of the story. If you want to mention dick size, do it in a more subtle way. Just don't fall into that trap of so many writers on here that bigger dick equals better story.
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