All Comments on 'Under Control Ch. 01'

Good start - looking forward to more!

soft whimpering moan of need for more

more please??

This would have been a credit to any author; for a new author's first submission, it was quite exceptionally good. Welcome, thank you, five stars and more like it, please!

Very good start, I hope to read more about these two!

I came to this story through reading your poem.

A sign of a very good story in Literotica is that it retains interest, intrigues and is enjoyed by people who do not have the same buttons, fetishes or inclinations. These, as it happens, are not my buttons (either way) – of no great interest to you or the other readers but it does add weight to my high opinion of this story.

You paint the woman’s character and give details to achieve interest and empathy for her. At the same time you give just enough about the man to involve the reader yet retain mystery.

We are left with ambivalence and uncertainty on how it might turn out. I mean, we sort of know but there is just a suspicion that it could all go differently.

Well done