All Comments on 'Undying Ch. 11-15'

I love the complexity of your characters. They’re more than just black or white, all good or all evil unlike those of most writers. Your characters are as mixed up as we are. Feels very familiar. LOL

The identical POVs not enhance your story. You could have more efficiently accomplished the same level of communication & information to your readers without forcing them to read two virtually identical POVs.

Simply including the 2-3 sentences of additional info as a character's internal dialogue would have done it.

At first, I thought it was a huge duplication/cut & paste error in the manuscript.