All Comments on 'Unexpected Ch. 13'

Oh dear God, when will this go SOMEWHERE, so much left unanswered and 13 chapters in, I was enjoying it, even though early on it went haywire, but seriously, this chapter added nothing.

So nothing happened in this chapter, eh? Too funny! I'm happy Alex's father decided yo barge in and be a douchebag, costing him the opportunity to see his grandson! I honestly thought Trace was going to ask Alex if he could move more of his things in..With Alex's parents plan to take away Benny/seek visitation no longer a threat, I hope to see the two talk about making the commitment and being a real family. I forgot how old Beth is, but will she have a love story with Jack, if she decides to come back?

Just as in symphonic works there can be movements which don't develop the argument but are enjoyable on their own terms so this, and other chapters, in this work. I think they also help an understanding of Trace as a character.

So please carry on with this enjoyable story in whatever way you feel fit. It is a most enjoyable read.

Drama drama. ...but I enjoyed it. ...keep it coming

Adam Price sounds like a very sexy man too -- could you write something about him so that we can see what he looks like perhaps in casual clothes? Could he maybe come for a swim party and we get to see him in swim trunks with a gorgeous chest (with hair?) exposed? A real treat!

I absolutely LOVE this story! There are parts that are confusing, but in general it is well put together. I had tears in my eyes the last few chapters. It is a wonderful love story. So many stories jump right to the sex, BING BANG BAM, it was refreshing to read this one. There was love, conflicting emotions, secrets, action, drama this story has it all. Thank-you!

It seems like your racing to get through the story, which is making it crap. You need to slow down dialogue/descriptions to make it flow easily instead of blah blah blah next drama. I'm not a writer, but I've read A LOT of stories/books and yours just feels like you threw words together and submitted it without proofing to see how it reads.

Just take your time and reread it a few times before you press send ok

Please put Ch.14 up

"..bacarat crazy" LOL I think you meant "batcrap crazy" SMH

Anyway, it's getting pretty boring by now. I just wanna know how this ends. You're obviously making stuff up, not in a tolerable, still-can-power-through-it kinda way. No, its the wake-me-the-f@#k-up-when-it's-over kind of way. Stop, you need to stop or hire a ghost writer to write for you because you don't have talent. The sycophants raining praises are either yourself using a fake account or just people without the slightest bit of discernment for what constitutes as a good story.