All Comments on 'Unexpected Hunt Pt. 01'

Very nice story. Keep going....!++

Good story. Different. A few grammatical errors and typos to sort (get an editor) and watch how you introduce the third character as it is easy at first to cross over the two girls. Keep writing.

I thought the scene and the situation were described very well. A good start. It didn't bring out emotional responses as much as it could have, but it was much more than just a mechanical description.

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Wonderful story I wondered if you were Ellah or our sharp shooter, you know how to hit your target. So are you planning to (un) dress your kill.