All Comments on 'Unexpected Love'

Well, I just finished reading my story after being published — that's after about the fifth time reading prior to publishing; and I apologize for the dozen or so typos I missed. I didn't know who to ask to proofread a Lesbian story, so just tried to do it myself — that rarely works very good and it didn't here. I hope you were still able to get a little enjoyment out of the story and thank everyone who made it this far ~ yukonnights

Story was so good, I didn't even notice them. Looking forward to your next tale!

Don't get down on yourself for a few grammatical errors. You created some wonderful characters and shared a beautiful story of love. Please keep sharing your talents with us.

It's a good story, yukonnights, nice and easy, and a few beautyspots don't distract from that. I liked the descriptions of the attraction combusting in Lauryn and Angelie, and think you did another great job in writing a realistic story. I liked the dialog style; it seems like you're getting a hang of it, or maybe I'm getting used to it.

This was one well written story and I love the romance of it. Yeah there were a couple of typos, but didn’t detract from the story.

My one and only issue, and its just me. A girl with unshaven arm pits.

I'm not an editor, but your story was amazing! I loved the flow, it was smooth but the viewpoints were changed pretty quickly so I got a bit confused. There were grammatical errors, but I'm not holding that against you. I'll be back on here again to read another story from you soon!

Well done! Love comes in many forms, this story shows that! Thank you!

A beautiful tale. I loved it. More please!

Justplainjeff stfu with your whiney insecurities about body hair. It’s a lesbian story, it’s not for you.

Yukon, nicely done. I thoroughly enjoyed it. And for the record, women with hairy pits make me swoon!

Well, I'm late to this party, but for what it's worth I liked the story. Much respect for the shifting POV experiment; you mostly pulled it off.

Your comment about the proof reading struck a chord--it's amazing how all of the mistakes light up in red *after* a story is published. :)

Your depiction of love is beautiful and i hope the world will see it as the wondrous beauty you illustrate. Also love the permission you give for others to yell at you for any confusion caused- i wonder does it let some of the air out of their sails? It was a bit hard to follow whos POV was present at times since it all seemed to be 1st person from all most characters, wondered if maybe using bold and italics to help refer to which pov the narration is coming from. Overall I loved this story confusing moments and all! Thank you

Beautiful story.

I really appreciate you leaving out the He said She said, it was much more flowing and enjoyable to read.