All Comments on 'Unexpected Revenge'

The story content was good, but you need help with spelling and grammar. Maybe use Word Perfect or something similar to help with these flaws if you can't find someone to edit or proof-read your stories. Good luck and keep writing.

Even if the author just reads the work again before posting would catch some of the mistakes. A good story line and very erotic even if it was a bit rough to read.Thanks

OMG U should spend a little less time text messaging and learn how to write in complete sentences with real words and the difference between they’re and their…

Good story line but bad grammar makes it difficult to read.

a comment to the commenters enjoy the story and shut the fuck up!!!!!!!!!

W.T.F is this dogshit? Pathetic and childish nonsense.

i loved it, so very real and hot.

she deserved the enjoyment of the young stud

....have your daughter for a therapist.If this is realistic the white stuff coming down is angel dust.

Husband is cheating so she decides to turn herself and her daughter into cheating sluts? How is this revenge? He's going to come out of the divorce smelling like a rose and the wife's reputation is going to be soiled. Really, really dumb

Wife and daughter become sluts. That's revenge? Boy are you stupid.

She had no proof. He had both his daughters testimony and Dave's testimony. His wife got raped in Court when all she had was heresay and her husband had witnesses. I wonder how she thinks her revenge worked out for her now when she's living in a shit hole apt. and working 2 jobs a day to make ends meet?

The wife and daughter becomes sluts and expose themselves to disease. Where's the revenge? Stupid.

Why can't these stories be shorter and more direct to the point ,if you fuck your mom, father, sister etc get to ie sooner all the padding is lousy

Gloria hamminsworty

- D*i*v*o*r*c*e !!! What a couple of low-life cunts! The wife got even but lost her husband and probably a good deal of money in the divorce. The daughter is a disloyal,betraying piece of shit who should have stayed the fuck out of the situation between her parents. NO inheritance for her! For sure!

Only a cuckold/wimp can write such a crap. A real man would her and the daughter throw out and divorce her!!!

Right behind Paul walked in Doug, Paul's twin brother that had been given up for adoption at birth, along with his very young girlfriend Kimberly.

GET AN EDITOR!!!!!

ThEn relates to time, thAn is a comparison.

Brad fucked her mouth, thEn fucked her cunt. Her cunt was wetter thAn her mouth.

The word is spelled YOU.

Site relates to location, sight relates to vision.

And then? He takes the 20 year old and beats him until he can never have sex again and then throws his wife and daughter out of his house. He alone decides who is present in his house. So what's the problem?

Where's the incest it wasn't in this story now the true ending of the story the husband beats the,20 year old half to death and makes it to where he can never get a erection again