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by Gindrinker

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UAlbanyGirl518UAlbanyGirl518almost 4 years ago

Good story. I have it 4 stars.

Could have been 5, but it was lacking in feeling and emotion. You did a good job at the beginning where she had trepidation and concern about what they wanted, But then when they made their move, it devolved into “Tab-A and Slot-B” mechanics.

It would have been better if we knew what was going thru her mind as the men used her. So she had an XHamster profile. Why would she let her uncle and his friends rape her? As a married woman, she should have struggled a bit too.

Nice touch on the water sports, but you kinda threw it in as an afterthought. Would have enjoyed more detail on that.

Still and all, a solid effort.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 4 years ago
Amazing read

Read this over and over several times now... Definitely needs a part 2

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Polite professional Englishman who enjoys writing, and occasionally writing erotica. I enjoy hearing constructive criticism, comments and views about anything I write because I like to write for other people. Ideally whilst reading my work you will be getting off. If not, any ...