All Comments on 'University with Allison'

Nice build up. Looking forward to your character development. Good personal interaction. Thanks.

love room mate stories. can lead to interesting things

were well done. I like the dynamic you've started here. I hope your next chapter will be a bit longer. Hope to see more on this one. Thanks.

Great first story, hope to read more of it soon.

I've been reading another story and couldn't help but to see how the stories are the same. Not sayin that you stole it but it's something I picked up on fast. I think the names are even the same! Don't like yours as much as the other. Oh well, guess we all can't be great writers. If I remember the story's name I'll let you know.

you have it going strong, slow intro with a possible flareup right at the start that doesn't happen then the interval with one out jogging and the other in the shower fantasing then discovering they are roommates and the possible conflict of interests in the supposedly straight one. All of it very tight and definately demanding a continuation.

I was going to comment on your story but your biography says you don't want to hear from guys. Too bad.

You should put that at the begininng of each story you write.

I love a story with a build, can't wait for the next one!

Totally got 2 right the next cause yea 4 real no hangers like that

I love the plot... and I understand it's your first story... But the English major in me can't be held back XD

You moved WAY too fast. Bumping into one another, being roommates, her being straight and Alex crying about it. <_< WAY- WAY to fast. Slow down, spread the story out, be more detailed to do that.

They should become friends before anything sexual happens (on Alex's part) they just met and she is masturbating? Sure, I guess that could happen...... Dx

But yeah that's all I have lol Wait... Try writing in a Word document and re-reading like five times before posting. <3

How did you get this story in a lesbian story line?

There's absolutely nothing about girls having sex with each other at all

However there is a great opportunity to make it into a lesbian story

Just leaving it the way that you left it makes me want you to finish it with both girls finding each other and having sex maybe even having one lose her virginity to the other one on a holiday weekend somewhere.

There's so much potential for it to become a really good sexy story.