All Comments on 'Unrelenting'

There's no one more dangerous than a man with nothing to lose. Snakes like Larry always find this out the hard way. Well written. 5 stars.

Good story with a different perspective. Sad that Lori committed suicide.

A good story with a total slime ball of a male lead.

This scumbag fits the definition of a psychopath to a tee. Well done story.

What goes around comes around. Surprised it took so long. He's the kind of guy that we all hate. I only wonder why he used a condom with married women. D

An unexpected twist to the ending of the story.

What a descriptive narrative.

Excellent story. Unlike other commentators I think the punishment the MC got was far worse than a bullet in the head. Being locked up with nobody giving a rat's ass about you is really bad. To add to it, the MC thinks he's got a shot at parole so he stoically endures physical and sexual abuse. Then as the time for his parole hearing draws near, his tormentor shows up and dashes his hopes of ever getting out before his full 20 years are up. Perfect! Perhaps it could be worse is if he was having to do hard labor in addition to the abuse, or maybe if the the husband kills him when he finally does get out in 20 years.

Thanks for your writing.

Unlike other stories from this author, still well-written, and unique. That said, the story is too dark for me. I felt uncomfortable with the MC all along. Unfortunately this author writes no more.

I've always thought a story should be told on this site from the point of view of one of the rotten seducers. Good job. I don't expect to see the post-modern version where the story is not only told from his point of view but he gets away without trouble, leaving behind wreckage. I guess the call for "diversity" can still only go so far.

Dang! I screwed up my comment. I was going to have the accountant turn a walk off, and Larry says his final words. “ Damn, that guy is unrelenting!”

Wow… one of the worst villains I have read on this site. No… the worst. Thanks for the story

Not enough payback. He still got off easy. No public shaming, no ridicule, not enough pain and suffering for the careless pain and suffering he had committed.

You bungled it all up. You made sure to go into detail of the horrors this man committed but skipped on 99.99% of the horrors that should be committed on him. It almost feels like you're rooting for the scumbag.

Poor choice of subject matter.

Very good tale ofna cheater getting their come ups!

I was hoping he would get a bullet from the cuck-hold husband

The final page was just as good an outcome

Hated it a fail amongst a sea of magnificent stories

Hated Morrisson character

Sorry, but hated it. A better title would have been “Diary of a home wrecking scumbag”.

At last a story with a different angle. 5 stars.

Definitely a pre-pandemic story line. Not a bad plot but too bleak to be entertaining after nearly two years of plodding through shit.

An interesting evaluation of a pervert.

In truth of fact there are many men as vicious as this animal just as there are women who are as Justice vicious as this purp. The comedy nominator of course is these people are sociopathic nursesThe comedy nominator of course is these people are sociopathic Narcissist who believe that the entire rule exists for their pleasure and have not one shred of caring for what they do to others.

I wanted to quit this this story several times but your reputation kept me going and I am not all dissatisfied with the story.

5 stars

The SOB got what he deserved. I only continued reading the story to see if he got what he deserved from doing to others. Not my cup of tea though. Still a 4.

For a time I thought he might not get his comeuppance.

Glad he did—it rescued the story from the one star trash.

It still was a real downer that I wish I hadn’t read.

Bill

Another excellent offering from FM. Thank you so much!

Great ending line!!

At least Lori saved Nathan the pain and expense of a divorce!!!

The best description of this story is depressing. Yes, Lori was naive' and seduced by a skilled predator but at the end of the day she became a willing slut. But suicide is such an awful end that it's hard to take any pleasure out of reading this story.

Suicide is an act for which there can never be closure. Nathan will never understand her behavior or why she betrayed him so completely. Nor will he know whether she committed suicide because she was ashamed of her betrayal of the love they shared or because she was despondent over her lover and master's rejection of her. What part of her fall into debauchery was his fault? Could he have done something to prevent it?

Larry is a despicable and totally amoral person. But if we are to read FM's stories we will encounter such characters frequently.

If the reader prefers endings where justice triumphs, evil is punished and there is a happy ever after, FM may not be your cup of tea.

I for one, find suicide distasteful even when it's the antagonist. I wish it had been included in the list of tags.

The best description of this story is depressing. Yes, Lori was naive' and seduced by a skilled predator but at the end of the day she became a willing slut. But suicide is such an awful end that it's hard to take any pleasure out of reading this story.

Suicide is an act for which there can never be closure. Nathan will never understand her behavior or why she betrayed him so completely. He will never know whether she killed herself because she was ashamed of her betrayal of the love they shared or because because she was rejected by Larry her seducer and master. Family and friends will never learn the details of her debauchery so her motives and her husband's contribution to them will be suspected.

Larry of course is a despicable person and totally amoral. A feature often found in this author's characters.

That said, if we are to read FM's stories, we must be prepared to engage hateful people. This makes it difficult for the reader to "enjoy" the story.

While the story is well written though possibly a little too drawn out, it is laced with pain for all major players.

I don't think I'd read it again nor would I recommend it to readers who prefer a neat, satisfying ending where justice is preserved, evil is punished and there's a happy ever after.

Yes the cheating asshole caught finally

I had a good friend his wife was a victim of a mister charming. My friend caught on confronted his wife she amided to her wrong doings and asked for forgiveness. He asked what would she would have done if I had cheated on her she said she would try to forgive me. He said really the way you acted when I just danced with an old high school friend how long it took her to treat him normal again. She was sorry again for the way she treated him. He said it was a tough road because different things keep coming up and causing backflashes and he gets upset for not going after prince charming. I said I know a guy who knows a guy that might be able to help him. He asked who? I said let me talk to the guy I knew and find out if something could be do. A few months later prince charming was found in a park naked with his privates screwed down to a teeter totter with a strap and screws. His testicles had to be removed but kept his non-functioning penis. I thought it serves him right.

in every respect....5

These motherfuckers don't just accidentally slip and fall in love with somebody else's woman, and they don't spend time and care about your life by accident! They like the corruption of goodwill into attraction into lust into sex, but the womwn herself is completely insignificant except for the cunt. It's a power trip, and that's all... That's also why you don't forgive the bitch. She should KNOW better, she's spent her entire life telling men NO! What's one more NO gonna hurt? Him? Fuck him in the ass with a cactus, he didn't marry you.

Into this story when I want to read about someone cutting his nuts off and shoving is dick down his throat. Too bad how much it cost Lori and Nathan before it happened. He's going to do well in a cell with Billy Ray Bob and Bubba since he's such a good looking guy... Signed: BTW

Don't mess with the bean counters

They seem to have very analytical minds. They work at it till they got 100%! Then let the shit shower go!

Good to see a firm revenge well carried out.

At some point shit will stick to you.

Make out fine male and female. Although most are just in it for the endorphins not particulary to ruin .

then you are truly stupid. Like predator goes for harder victim - 3 women in a bar and he goes for the most reluctant one? Since he is comparing himself to lions do you know what do lions do? They go for the easiest victim because that is how a real predator thinks.

Also predators do not study psychological profiles of their victims ("I made a mental note to myself"), that is a fantasy of the writer. Predators act naturally, as predators(!) and by experience.

So my view is that this all is just blabbering BS. The plot of a downfall is more interesting.

Often stories vaguely cover the lathario’s actions, usually from the female prey’s view point, or the spouse/fiancé’s review to the prey for how she was duped. This covers it from the actual predator, from beginning to end of the hunt. First I’ve read of it on Literotica.

Been thinking of trying to write something for the site, but I get stuck with the predator’s nitty-gritty view point, as I’m nowhere near being one myself. Oh, I can easily make gross generalities, but any further and I’d be making stuff up fro absolute thin air. This will help.

The closest I’ve ever gotten to one was one of my teenage years’ best friends. He picked up and dropped a very small handful (seriously, maybe 7-8 girls in 3 years) of girls in high school. But among us nerds and geeks we thought he was “The Man”. But he never went out of his way to say how or why he did it. Of course all us other friends wanted to know “how” he did it (very average looking guy), but he never let on. But, duh! Of course we thought we “knew” why he did it; we were teenage boys. But afterwards, years later, I’ve come to think it was more than that. I think it was training ground for him. I really think it started when he dated, for a couple of weeks someone who was at least 7 years older (17 v ~24; she was an RN). She was probably his first REAL challenge... and conquest.

We lost touch by the beginning of his second year in college. But a common friend of our’s, who went to the same college, told me he burned through women like crazy. One one, or two, or three-night stand after another. A lot of them were older (post-graduate student, and remember, at 20-21 4 or 5 years is a lot), and one or two were married. And this carried on through part of graduate school also. This particular story finally showed, perhaps, my friend’s thinking and reasoning processes.

Oddly, he was finally “nailed down” by a psychotic bitch (literally... ended up hospitalized) who somehow got him to commit. I think it took one crazy person to be able to seize another semi-crazy person.

....Is not a nice place to visit! We've all read many stories of unfaithful skanks here, but none that I've read so far have burrowed into the deranged psyche of an amoral predator as deeply as this one has. Those of us with any sort of moral compass are thoroughly outraged and disgusted with the character, which means that the author did his job quite well!

While it was clear that there would be consequences at the end, I was gagging in disgust all the way through the story, as you intended. ;-)

Top marks for another well-told tale!

i like the little twist right at the end.

Not much fun to read since the protagonist was such a gonad, but still interesting and written well.

you are misandrist pig . how is the whore a "victim" ?

was she forced to cheat on her husband repeatedly , with many men ?

whose name did she write in her death throes ? not her husbands .

she is a whore and you are an enabler/apologist .

not sure how i feel about it .regardless : 4*

i mean the whore killed herself . im good with that .

but why pile on the scumbag protagonist ?

not sure why the husband hates him , he helped the husband learn that his wife was a whore . hell , good riddance to bad whores .

i mean he didnt kill the whore .

the whore killed herself , and good riddance .

and cuck-boy "husband" really has no reason to hate the protagonist .

the whore was the trash who was cheating . protagonist didnt MAKE her the whore she was .

another misandrist reveals herself .

no matter if you think you are male .... you are not .

you are a bitch one way or another .

cuckster .

But this main character is such a vile creature it almost made my skin crawl, just reading his next crime in-the-making. Prison was way too good for this guy. He should be flayed alive, then left to his own devices somewhere in the Mojave desert.

That would be a good start for what he deserves.

Nothing would make a tale about an unremorseful serial predator who enjoys destroying marriages and lives SUBLIME

ONLY A MYSOGINIST WOULD EVEN CONSIDER MAKING SUCH A REMARK

But then having grown up on a pig farm and working double shifts at convenience store might make the dawggy unfamilar with the denotation of that word

great story, which ruined my day. thanks?

Very well done.

You had everyone hating him with good reason.

But, while he is a disgusting predator, the cheating cunt was not drugged, was not forced, was not in any way "made" to betray her husband. Yeah, she was "conned" but she was a fully consenting cunt the whole time even taking on both of the men. and so committed was she to her betrayal that according to the husband, she offed herself because the douchebag dumped her.

And of course whoever said he would have no influence over the parole board was exactly right.

The douchebag will have made parole. At least he got some gay sex as a bit of revenge.

I know. Your stories are so much better..

Not your normal interesting work. So many words written for a character with the depth of a thimble. This was one of those stories that you read thinking that it has to get better, but no. What a waste of time.

But it will have no effect. Given his good behavior, he'll get paroled. That's the way the system works.

That final line really kicks this story up a notch for me. It's easy to write stories about a douche bag who gets his comeuppance, but to do so while telling a story that is both compelling and cohesive is very impressive.

If you have time, I do have two questions about the writing:

1. Looking back, do you think you could have done a better job of disguising the foreshadowing when he firsts suggests the bribe? As I was reading it seemed really obvious that foreshadowed prison time since I couldn't think of any other reason it would have been included in the writing. On the other hand, when writing a short story keeping all information relevant is kind of important, so it might just be inevitable.

2. I don't really understand how the detective got a recording of him talking about the phantom signs because when they're having sex with Lori, he only refers to the Director as "my friend" and it seems unlikely they would be discussing signs at that point. How did you see it happening in your head, was the detective spying on him independently of his interactions with Lori?

Anyways, great story, intriguingly grotesque characters without sacrificing one's sense of justice. Good job, and thank you for writing.

BoRING....blah blah..blah...its Damn boring plot was pathetic..

You know pretty boys in jail always end up becoming some one wife inside the jail...I wish you could have written that he was raped..and become the prison white whore...that would b Karma...

Still love it. Still five stars.

Unlike Karma which refers to a reincarnation cycle. Reaping what you sow only takes a season to reward the farmer. In this case, a scumbag that liked to take advantage of people fucked himself while fucking over others. He sowed dishonor, disrespect and deceit and now has reaped the rewards. When he finally gets out of prison, it will not end. It will never end.

"I mean, I wouldn't mind trying something new, but I guess we're just not that adventurous." – Not meaning to blame Lori here, who is very much a victim, but did it ever occur to her to tell her HUSBAND that she might want to try something new? So many of the wives in these stories blame there “boring” marriages for their cheating, but never do anything themselves to make them more exciting.

Her husband “isn't very interested in all that exotic stuff." How does she know? Has he told her? Has she tried and was rejected? Or did she just assume that since he didn’t try that he wouldn’t be interested; maybe he thought that SHE wasn’t interested and was afraid of being rejected so didn’t try.

the shit rolls back up;-hill. TK U MLJ LV NV

The Parole Board would take into consideration his behavior while in prison. The obviously biased testimony would have little effect on the Parole boards final decision. They are looking to get rid of people and not have to pay the cost of keeping someone like him in prison. He got out, moved away with the consent of his parole officer. He got a good job (after all, he could still sell and sales drive companies) and moved on with his life. With very little learned.

Wow! What a prick, huh? Good story, Frank. Really enjoyed the end wherein he got his comeuppance. Again good writing and reading. You're becoming one of my favorite LW authors. Cheers!

Your other stories have been from the victim's side, but this one gets inside the mind of the predator. He gets what he deserves, but destroys many along the way. I feel sorrow for Lori, who was deliberately stalked as prey. Every wife should read this story. Keep writing.

The DJ

Forewarned is forearmed.

I also applaud our razor equipped anonymous commentator. Personally, I prefer blunt force, an unregistered three pound river rock does an amazing job on his pretty face and fingers. A well practiced swing with my driver will push his junk so deep he'll think he had a sex change operation; and going for a home run with his knees is always exhilarating. Try not to get carried away; you'll want to leave something for next time.

You simultaneously made me cross my legs and applaud. Brava, brava! Also, I entirely agree. Except I'd grind the genitalia in a hand powered sausage grinder, etc. Silver platter indeed! ;P Yes, I am not kidding. No it doesn't bother me how that makes the community of the very caring and sensitive feel. PS: ditto to the cheating, faithless whores. Sauce for the gander is sauce for the goose, if you will. The muslims ought to be able to help with that part. Ask the saudis or taliban to lend out their staff. Ta!

Written in the perspective of the deceitful, arrogant, good for nothing predator. That was quite interesting, he was detestable, and I feel bad that Lori fell for such a complete and total asswipe, but it was her own fault for letting it get that far. She didn't seem to value her marriage with her husband that much as she stopped defending him quite early on. The fact that she committed suicide left me a little sad. I feel if anyone it should have been Larry who died at least he's suffering getting buttfucked in prison

shut the fuck up

...need to meet more people like me. If it were my wife he were pursuing, or even my daughter, MIL, sister or even a good friend, he would be sentenced to me. What would that sentence consist of?

He would wake up tied to a wall. I would wait until he was awake again before I used a straight razor to cut his clothing from his body. Then when he was nude, I would kneel down in front of him and take him by his cock. That I would move out of the way.

Then with a straight razor blade, I'd made a tiny 3/4" incision on the bottom of his scrotum. From that incision I would pop one testicle out. Now, if you take a testicle and snip it with a razor, he can bleed to death. To stop any bleeding, what you do is firmly grasp the testicle and pull. Pull gently and smoothly, but UNRELENTNGLY. It will tear free from deep within his body and will not bleed. Then, I would do the same to the other. A little antiseptic and a few stitches and he'll never be as good as new. The testicles would be treated exactly as if they were Rocky Mountain Oysters and consumed as he watched.

But now we have a quandary. With testosterone replacement, he'll be able to have a sex life again if turned loose at this point. So one other modification needs to be made. The head of his cock would then be removed. So using a strong elasticated band placed an inch below the head of his cock, the blood supply would then be effectively shut off. One could just wait a few days and that would probably be enough to cause enough cellular damage, but I wouldn't take that chance. Too much other work to be done. So I would use my straight razor and would take the head of his cock off. A little high heat and the cauterizing of the wound, carefully avoiding his urethra and would stop any blood flow below the band on his cock.

Last would be his eyes. I believe I would use a spoon for that, slowly digging into one side of the eye socket and pressing it slowly and UNRELENTINGLY back into his head until I was behind the eyeball and then would scoop it out. Then I would follow that with his other eye. At this point my UNRELENTING revenge would be over. A call to the police to give his location and he would never give my name to them. Because he would know that I had already paid for the same thing to be done to his closest relative.

Yes, I would willingly do that to protect the women around me from an animal like Larry.

Wow. BRILLIANT STORY!!!! This was one of the best. I am still on a high after reading this. I found this story so masterful that I was disappointed when it was over. The way he weaved his way into the wife's life was exactly how someone like him would do it. He was a complete narcissist and so caught up in his own hype that he made the PERFECT villain. When he described his tactics on seducing the wife, I couldn't stop laughing. He was the guy that you love to hate. While you hated his guts and couldn't wait for everything to blow up in his face, you couldn't help but to be impressed with his snakelike attacks. He knew exactly what he was doing.

I did feel sorry for the wife. She was a cheater who got played, but you couldn't help but to feel that she didn't really stand a chance. She was just too naïve trusting. She made such an easy target. If she were a gazelle, she'd be the one who would see the lion a long ways off and feel secure because she knows that she is faster. The lion creeps slowly towards her. Every time she sees the lion she still thinks she is safe because he doesn't look like he's moving. Before she knows it, the lion is picking his teeth with her bones.

As much as the main character amused me, I was hoping that this story wouldn't end with him getting away with it. But he paid for his crimes and then some. Couldn't have happened to a better guy.

Way to go pretty boy,,, all I can say is I hope like hell BUBBA dont use any lube...When this scuz ball gets out of jail, best thing that could happen is for A few members of the public find him,, find an old shack on A farm somewhere,, nail its nuts to the floor ,,,douse the place with gas and hand pretty boy the dullest knife one can find,, toss a match in the door as they leave

A tale like this had to be told. Fiction it may be, people like this exist. Stop them if you know them.

I can't believe the last three comments. This prick asshole Larry was the ultimate predator. He fucked up many lives of women he encountered in his life before prison. Fucking asshole went too far. Now he is the ultimate faggot ass-fucked prick that he should be. Badass? Yes i'd say his ass right now is a round as a Louisville Slugger. I would call that bad. He is the worst kind of male that exists. As for the husband of the woman he destroyed, I think he should have his own tale written from his perspective.

Yes there are horrible people in this world. Hopefully all wind up like Larry; an ass-slut in prison.

This guy is my hero. What a badass! Too bad he ended up in the slammer.

Well written, but you dragged the reader along in the mind of a psychopath on his progression of worsening depravity. Why? Who really needs to go there? It isn't pleasant or enlightening. No redeeming value to this plot. Not rated, because while it is well written I just don't see the purpose of this awful story.

Not one good, redeeming quality to this story! 1*

Nicely written and a happy ending all the way around.

Wonderfully written. I wasn't sure where you were headed and so I was quite surprised by the ending. The SOB got what he deserved. Kudos to the hubby.

If you cant perform you teach and if you cant teach you work for the state another example of the stupid chores the states hire people to do wasting our money..

Larry is a first class ashole & his married conquests are nothing but two bit sluts. If a wife loves her husband, loves their life together & have half a brain--no other men will be able to get in their pants --regardless of the bullshit the predator spews.. He was able to screw the married whores because they either thought about sleeping with other men or they've fuck'd around before--it's that simple. I thought for sure Larry was going to end up with a bullet in his head. It's not all Larry's fault, all these dumb sluts had to do was recognize bullshit & remember their marriage vows.

It's illegal to record someone without them knowing about it, and any such recordings would be thrown out in a court of law. Nathan would know that, and I'd recommend doing a little basic google-research in the future before playing the legal trickery in a story. I know that a lot of people use it in "cheating wives" stories, but that only works if they're recording in their own home where there is no expectation of privacy. In someone's private business, such as Larry's boss, in a bugging performed by a detective agency on behalf of a state worker like Nathan? That can and will get the law books thrown at you.

That said, this guy Larry is such an unrelenting douchebag, resulting to deceit and date-rape to get laid, that I can't help but not care.

you step on toes and then you get the horn, TK U ML LV NV

They turn so damn slowly - he abused so many - hurt so many -

He may get his in the end LOL - but it hardly seems enough -

I agree it is well put together and well written - I enjoyed reading it all

A very good story with a very good ending.

Has the science got any blood or other test to mesaure the inclination to low serotonin level in the brain at stress situation at our some fellow people? Could the school teach the student for conflict management technics, because this technics could help deep depression risked our people fellows to avoid the deep depressin state without medicin? The modern antidepressant treatment is very good against deep depression, but it can not assist in promp emotional crisis. Here the good conflict managment is the succesful...........If sombody does not know about herself.............

...when someone gets what they so richly deserve out of life. Very good story, chalk one up for the little guys.

As the rant of an egotistical man. As such he got almost what he deserved.

I've gotten into the habit of checking comments before I read a story. This one looked interesting. It really is two stories, a 3 page get the wife and a 2 page revenge one. Both were good, although the attempt to tie 'unrelenting' to the husband was weak

This story was a bit boring, but OK. However, it's not up to the plot standards you set with the Miz Sara stories.

This must be an Easter story since it laid an egg ! :-)

@ Dear Anon you are wrong. THIS STORY IS NOT SLUT WIFE/WHIM STORY. The husband were balls and he wanted to kick her in the curb. He contracted a private investigator against his wife. Lori thought she got the lottery, because her husband would tell his wife the affair and both would be divorced for living together. SHE LOST HIS HUSBAND AND HER LOVERBOY SAME TIME AND SHE GOT SUICIDE IN HER DEVASTATED STATE!!!!!!!!! Her husbands have so great balls, that he follows the predator in the prison to ban his parole.

Excellent interesting revenge story. He wanted to divorce her and he contracted a PI for gathering evidences against her. HE COULD USE THE VIDEO AGAINST THE PLAYER BOY IN THE FRAUD TRIAL. Excellent but sad revenge story.

In the end, literally, he got his.

Unfortunately, she comitted suicide and that is trajic.

Most of us know that when you betray a sweet little trusting beauty that she is extremely vulnerable to self abuse for quite a while.

Hopefully, asshole as he is probaly referred to (punn intended), is being totally abused, nightmarishly so!!!

For sharing. This one was a bit long and a bit boring.

Just another stupid wimp/slut effort - boring! Shit - this garbage is starting to make size14noIQ look intelligent and that is very scary indeed.

This is a big step down from your other stories. I stopped reading on page 2. Nothing but the bragging of a stud (at least to the end of page 2). DEH

Not good in my own opinion. Really? Lacks excitement and creativity. Did not hold my attention.

An entertaining tale again! A fitting end to a so called swordsman of cocks. Too bad that in the real world some of the fairer half of our species still fall prey to these sociopathic pieces of shit in a human wrapper. It may be a miracle that they ever trust men after being used by boys.

How many men go out and check every single road sign in the state? Harry was obviously 3 sheets to the wind (again) and went into his customary afternoon "alcohol blackout" then woke up and forgot the main premise of half the dang story: phantoms rely on noone spending the time/energy to check every sign in the state.

...I think Asshole's comment about 'unrelenting' was a tad tongue-in-cheek.

This was a trifle long and could have been done in 3 pages, but it is a well-executed story of an amoral prick seducing a little innocent who should have held said amoral prick at bay. An all too common scenario of life - not modern life either - this crap has been going on as long as there have been two sexes.

Well written Francis - not likable people but a well-written tale.

It's almost a 'How to..." book as presented for the first 3 pages. After that we get to savor (!) the downfall of a relatively naive slut-in-waiting.

A harsh but realistic slice of life.

5 stars for me.