All Comments on 'Unseen Powers - Ch. 01'

Please don't resort to blatant foretelling: "Little did he know then, ..." It's a lazy, unsubtle device and entirely unnecessary here. Otherwise, very nicely written.

Good story beginning and as the reader said no staid comments are necessary. Looking forward to the rest of the story

I hope this is just a prolonged

Thank you for all your suggestions. They surely help me. I've completed Chapter 2, more info on my profile.

Well written and with just enough to make the reader come back for more.

I got to the word bisexual and quit.

Why y'all fetishize black ppl so much?