All Comments on 'Unveiled Desire'

Your story was sweet, long, and very arousing. You took just the right amount of time to tell it. keep up the excellent work

You had me wondering at first,as you must of anticpated...But the story got sweeter 'N warmed up untill the sweetness melted 'N disloved the whip cream into a sweet sticky ***** ... Thank-you...Flintstone54

Very well written.. even poignant! This is the first story upon which I have ever commented. I absolutely loved it! Keep up the good work. :)

One of the most erotic stories I have read in a long time. Thank you for telling me about this story before hand. I looked for it and anticipated a great story and wasn't disappointed. Two girls together are the most erotic and greatest adventure any of us guys can think of. I really appreciate your fine efforts in dreaming up, writing and bringing this story to us. Thank you. Now I must get back to other of your stories, I haven't exausted my want, nay, need for stories about loving girls. A male friend, Jim.

Any one who did not get a true sense of the love expressed here is truly apathetic.Why can a man not xpress this same amount of love and affestion in a story involving m/m experiences? I enjoyed it so much and look forward to more and more!!

I totally agree with you all

Damn... just damn good on ALL levels!!

Absolutely so very real-sounding. I love the build-up to the eventual sweet climax. By the way, I'm a woman...who loves stories like this. Thanks so much.

i'm a girl who wants more than anything to have an experience like that! that was wonderful.

Fisrt story ive ever commented on. Best of read on here

i want this so bad!

Intensely sexy and hot. This story really got my blood up, and it was so descriptive that I felt I was watching, not reading. I love the slow buildup and the nervous tension of the first time. These are girls from my fantasies.

This is the first story that I have ever felt the need to comment on, because it was amazing. You gave incredible descriptions, I felt like I was a part of the story. I had a similar experience, so this struck a chord with me. After I finished, I admit...I cried. As silly as that sounds, it was a moment of realization. I've never had a story bring that sort of emotional response to me. I look forward to reading your other works. Thank you.

I liked that it wasn't rushed. That really added to the somewhat timeless mood; I can hear the music of "Aase's Death", it's adagio tempo echoing their slow initial movements.

Soo sweet n romantic... reminds me of my girl...

Amazing! Perfectly paced wanting you begging for more. Encore!!

It's so slowwwwww, whew! Just so darn delicious.

This story is part of my daily fantasies. I want my first time with a girl to be like that. It's like I was there. So slow and seductive.... STEAMY!!!!

The story was written very well, not just pure lust but feelings of a woman to another woman.

I love that it's not a man's fantasy- it's real and beautiful, very much like my own first time... Every single emotion is conveyed through the physical in this story, very true to life.

You have a great storytelling gift and your attention to real woman details is so sexy!

THIS STORY TOOK YOU ON THE RIDE WITH THEM

Still my favorite story. =)

that's exactly how my first time was. i loved the attention to detail and the pacing... perfectly timed from beginning to climax (if you'll excuse the pun!)

i'm wet just thinking about your story...

I'm not normally a fan of lesbian stories but the writing and descriptive power of your story were remarkable. Very possibly the best narrative of female love I have read. I was very excited by it, which is the mark of a well written story. Kudos!

oh my gosh...so good

fekin luvved it

the discriptive writing is so unbelievably powerfull

made my heart pound

This was an awesome story! I had a movie going in my mind as I read your words---had to tidy up after this one :-P

Good job!

I loved every moment of it so well written wished I had a friend like that lol.E

This story is practically the image of me and my love losing our virginity to each other. From spending the night with each other, watching a movie while holding and caressing each other, all the way to making true, beautiful love.

The only difference- once we began, we simply couldn't stop. We went much farther, and fell asleep together. Showering together in the morning.

This story was beautiful. Thank you for writing this, dear.

-Chelsey Rae.

Feel free to email me, anyone.

chelseybear@gmail.com

Just say you saw my post on literotica.

<3

Thank you that made me want to fall in love again!

I loved the story! I think i jizzed at one point! I know how to turn my friend on now hahahaha!

exceptionally well written. thank you for sharing !

Wow thanks indeed

Wow! That was amazing.

Seriously dude (or are you a girl?), this is one of the best erotic stories I've read. I love the slow buildup. And the final slow action, great.

Graphic writing that I like. Can’t wait to finish all your stories.

Wow!! Just simply wow. Keep writing like that please!

Seventeen years old and still crackingly good. 4 stars, if only because it was too short.

Such an arousing story, i had to come. So thank you so much