All Comments on 'Vacation From Hell Ch. 01'

why tell the ending before you "start at the first". a lot of anticipation and buildup of interest was negated by reading the first few paragraphs. why is that so hard for writers to understand? well, i sure wish i hadn't already read those first few paragraphs.

What a total brain dead Wimp story. absolutely nothing original - and just like a thousand others on this wimp author laden forum

maybe the fishing will surprise. TK U MLJ LV NV

A great beginning. I smell trouble.

Somehow I think this story is going down the tubes in the next chapter.

Crap