All Comments on 'Vacation with Mom'

Lucky bastard.

More please, and soon.

Thank you

Good story I hope you will continue writing. Just one point I think in the future you should be aware of. You had him think to himself that she as been his fantasy for 24 years. I'm pretty sure a guy isn't into his mother sexually at say 3 years old. Might want to set that plot point for around 12 or so years old. But otherwise good stuff.

I loved your storyline, but you have a lot of grammar issues (missing words and so forth). Please take the time to read your work before you submit it. That will help you improve your writing.

I mostly liked it, but I don't think English is your native tongue. There were a number of distracting typographic errors that were distracting. Keep writing. Keep practicing.

Damn hot, made me hard!

pleasantly surprised at the end to see there's more to come. Grind that mutha out! English is obviously not your first language, but it matters not. This was fun, with the son in wonderment and awe at the sight and willingness of his mom. It will be interesting to see where you take it from here. Sounds like both of them are gearing up for a long affair, lasting past their visit to BANG COCK!

Great story.....Was she shaved or hairy pussy? Can't recall

Learn how to write dialogue. Do NOT preface each line of dialogue with the character's name and a colon. That format is for scripts. This isn't hard to know. Just look in pretty much any story or novel.

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I was about to cum soon so I asked mom:

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Me: "May I cum in you mom?"

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Mom: "Yesss. You can cum in wherever, whenever and how often you want."

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NO!

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I was about to cum soon so I asked Mom, "May I cum in you, Mom?"

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"Yesss!" Mom exclaimed. "You can cum in wherever, whenever and how often you want."

Good effort. Keep working on grammar, dialogue, and punctuation. I'm guess English is a second language?

Great first story. Can’t wait for part 2

Only an imbecile would write dialogue as if it were a script. Obviously the author never read a novel.

Pretty decent story. I look forward to the chapter... perhaps the two of them will return to the redlight distract for some fun.

I enjoyed it very much got so hard reading and stroking I came slowly thanks looking forward to more

Great story! Will read again (and again).

Hope there is more.

Is this A.I. Or poor English? Who knows.

Mom: "Please fuck me Alex. Please... Oh honey, you’re so big, fuck you feel good, oh God, oh God, fuck me Alex, fuck me Alex, FUCK ME!!!”

Me: “Oh mom, you’re so tight, I can’t believe how good you feel, I’ve wanted to fuck you for so long, oh mom, oh mom, fuck yes, so good, I’M GOING TO FILL YOUR PUSSY WITH MY CUM!!!”

Can't wait for chapter 2 3 4 5 6 7 hope this becomes along story all ready hooked made me wet my thong is soaking

It seems that English is not your first language, but you did very well!! It seems that wherever you go in the world, there are people that speak English. That makes it easy for people like me that have never learned a second language!! I enjoyed your story very much, so keep going with more of the same!! Thank you!!

great story every son should fuck his mother deep and wonderful starting when is 7 yrs old she should show him how a beautiful mother needs her meaty loveiness to be sucked eaten fucked and impregnated by her son.

So hot and very detailed as to the psychology of the situation. Loved it.

Chapter 2 please,please.

Excellent work. I have envisioned doing the same thing.

Needs some work on punctuation and grammar but the concept has potential.