All Comments on 'Valley of Sinners Ch. 05'

by Egmont Grigor

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Anonymousover 17 years ago

you going all over the place with this story

some of the plot you don't need to go there.narrow the story down you going on and on.

Egmont Grigor over 17 years agoAuthor

To 11/30/06 by Anonymous in usa

You could simply have said 'Narrow your plot.' But you didn't.

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Anonymousalmost 17 years ago

Great story and great writing.

I'm still reading this story but have been so pleased to discover you on Literotica. What a pleasure to read about NZ and the world you have created so eloquently. No reason to streamline anything if I am to understand the previous commentor. Your great.

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