All Comments on 'Vanessa'

A very compelling and intriguing beginning. I do hope there will be more of the tale of Vanessa to follow this one.

Well a nicely done beginning, all things considered, and I found that, while the obvious restraint in the overall mood and the telling was a bit annoying at first, when I allowed for the apparent British perspective, it actually added a bit.

That being said, however, the lack of detail, first in the character of Vanessa, and then in the sensuality of the pool scene itself was - for me, anyway - something that left the story short of its full potential for eroticism.

But please do carry on with this. I love the conception and, for the most part, the execution.

Cheers!

hope to read part 2 soon

Another fun frolic. Please keep em cumming~

Instead of just being told off for using the spa at night he ups the ante by assaulting her. Guess he figures that he will need somewhere to live when he gets kicked out of his apartment. Prison at least won't cost rent, plus he can get all the smacks he wants.

I didn't really enjoy this one but it wasn't that great from your previous works that I admire. I only read it because my name is Vanessa. I was so excited to read it only to be a bit disappointed. I liked the bit of character development though.

Feels like it was just getting started, barely scratching the surface of her submissive tendencies, if you aren't gonna continue it, please don't leave it open ended, it's a terrible habit of yours