All Comments on 'Vanessa Gets Caught in the Act'

Poorly written, duplicate paragraphs. You need an editor.

However, the concept was good

The story repeated itself in the middle and in my opinion, not complete. 2*

Just another cuck and skank whore story. 1☆

Sorry, YeahYeah. But if you want to improve your writing you definitely need an editor. There are so many mistakes it is difficult to follow. Of course, duplicating a large part of the last section didn't help.

As an example, you said, "Brad says, "Of course I would miss a chance to fuck you." You MEANT to say, "...I would NOT miss a chance..." You ended up with the exact opposite of what you intended.

So, to improve, pay attention to the details. Cheers.

I agree with the comment.

Another fetish writer who can't find the Fetish category...

Hopefully you stop writing.

Story line was ok. The writing sucks ass!!! Please take your time & read what you wrote before posting this garbage. Gave you a 1 for effort!!

Use tags! It lets prospective readers know what they're about to read. It's a respect thing, too.

Needs work......keep on keeping on,,,,,,,,,,

Convoluted. Take some English Composition courses.

Haters are cruel and don't create. 11 people favorited this story. Those are the ones to pay attention to. I hope you continue.

I like the premise or concept. I want to read about the MMF.

Go away, just go away and don't come back. Shit stories like yours are a dime a dozen in this category. Who needs more?

Formatting is messed up. Looks like you repeated some text. Not interested in cuckold play from the fetish waste bin. Stars were lost. No points gained

I’m afraid it could use some work before submission , like editing and proofreading .

I’m afraid it could use some work before submission , like editing and proofreading .

To the ignorant fool who plays “wrong category” on every story in here, all I can say is…Shut the fuck up. This entire loving wives category is all about wives having sex with others. If that’s what the story entails, it’s in the correct category. Now go jerk off to some gay porn or something.

Idiot cuck and whore play stupid games.