by live4thebj
The story may have been good, but the actual writing wasn't. In the following brief writing you did, ( I do something in hind site isn't something one does with her mother but neither is being naked with your pirates pressed against each other. I let my hands drift down her waste and place my hands on her ass.), you made 6 vocabulary and missed word mistakes. Right after your use of site you should have had a "that" and 2 words later should have had a "that". You put "her mother" when it should have been "their mother". Then you put "pirates" instead of "privates". Then a few words later you put "waste" instead of "waist". I know there were punctuations missing as well. But in that short bit of writing, you definitely took away from the flow of the story. If there wasn't so many in such a short space, I would have never said anything at all. Keep writing. Just check your wording better.
Of all the incest genres the mother/son relationships seem to be more erotic. I would love to see a love story developed between the mother and her son. At 42 years old mom is still young enough to be a mother again. Or they can continue their relationship without any babies. But speaking as a man....I'm going to want to fuck my baby into my woman. My mother.
Not big on slut Moms. A little background on her sexual history could have added a lot to this story.
Had some potential, but needed some heavy editing. Feels like you rushed this one.
3 stars.
More, please!
Mom must get pregnant, she will teach her son to be a man that will satisfy her every need, they will be lovers forever!
Very good story but it seems you left out a lot at the start more information was needed about mom's journey into stripping still gave it 5 stars!!!!!!!!! You need to go further into it and see how the live after they had sex!!!!!!
Holy hell that's a lot of excitement in just two pages, very well done. We do hope you continue. Five stars!
Loved the build up to this. Would of liked a bit background but other than 10/10.
Nice enough tale, with the usual minor spelling and grammar mistakes that we all make. Hind site? NO, it's hindsight. An editor and good spellcheck are recommended. But bravo anyway, you make it work!