All Comments on 'Verity's in Love Ch. 01'

You are mixing characters names. Get an editor and your characters seem less important than the minutiae of the plot.

Not a bad story, but everything seems a little rushed. Why the hell did he not confront them when he caught them in their "romp"?

Dump the cheating wife. She's not much of a mother anyway. Get the evidence, copy Brad's wife on it and crush them. They are both making a fool out of him. The kids will be better off without her and Stephen can find a better woman maybe one that's not so damaged.

He’s going to fight for his marriage because he wants this crazy bitch to raise his sons? I’m thinking his chances are better picking out a random woman off Main Street to be mom.

Enjoying it though

Sorry, I had to give up near the end of page one, way too much boring back story and detail, I had no idea what it had to do with the plot, if there was was one. Maybe try to focus more on what matters rather than all the meaningless detail.

Not really good. It got to the point that scanning it worked best.

What's known as a desperate dan , punching above his weight , always hanging till the last

His red flags should have been up when she refused to see his face during sex. Why would he have children with a wife who belittles? Or chastises him for using terms of endearment?

He shouldn’t have married her.

If you have to fight for spouse it's too late. Vows broken no trust, respect and honor left. Love gone right along. He showed All wimpy cuckold!!! Quit unless you like that kind of story