by Catalingus2005
STORY GAVE ME THAT ILL, ANGRY, FEELING THAT MEANS I WAS INVOLVED ...I HOPE THERE IS MORE TO THIS STORY...MAYBE SOME JUSTICE!! BUT IF NOT IT STILL WAS WELL WRITTEN...THANK YOU FOR SHARING YOUR TALENT
The broken glass across Micheal's carotid. When you have nothing to live for, perhaps death can be meaningful.
"Slaves were invaluable, if expensive. And their potential trades, from programming to metalworking to sexual servitude, were without measure. " Gee were they valuable if they were cheap?
"Basic housekeep, manual labor" Wonder if this is anything like basic housekeeping?
I am not going to bother to list any more examples, if English is your second language, find an editor whose English is the native tongue, knows sentences, grammer, puncation.
This story was very disturbing on a gut level. Be aware that it is not erotic, and is not intended to be I think. Yes, there is sex in the story, but it is not the "turn-on" variety of sex. This is a story that left me sad. It is quite well written, but if the author chooses to write another chapter, I will choose to not read it.
Just as with the husband we are mostly left to wonder what goes on behind the doors and create the image and imagine the details in our own mind. Still, I would not mind a follow up from another perspective, perhaps the wife. Or perhaps CJ would come to visit.
Great. For once a story wich is good but don't tell everything leaving the details of our own imagination. The last scene was really disturbing. Great work.
one of the best stories on LIT....only hope that we get to know what happened to her in detail....
I thought this was great; however, I honestly felt a little bit dissapointed in the end.
Allison always was meek, but Pete had a welling anger that was budding, building, and seeking a use throughout. Yet, his anger went nowhere.
This was still a wonderful story, one that left me wishing for more (honestly, how often does that happen on this site? not often I'm afraid).
The description is wildly misleading. I will grant that there is some emotional impact to this story, but that's not hard when the light fiction you're reading ends with despair and hopelessness. Provoking a reaction in your reader with rape is not the mark of a skillful writer. Really, I think this story is misplaced and inappropriate. I don't come to literotica to be reminded of the brutal realities that many people have to experience in unstable countries.
I never got into the sci-fi/fantasy section of Literotica but you know what, this MORE than lived up to section's name! THIS is what imagination will get you.
And more timely now than ever!