All Comments on 'Virginia Beach'

Nice. Well done. Good premise.

Did you read through your manuscript before submission? There are a few obvious errors that could have been amended if you had - but I think you should continue your submissions which will only improve with experience.

Agree it's a good story. I enjoyed reading it. Even though it is long for my taste, I looked forward to continuing as I reached the end of each page...A real page turner.

The language errors detract a bit from a wonderful story. Use a spelling and grammar checker. Watch the quotation marks, and homophones. Have someone else proofread it for you.

Thank you for submitting. i'd love to see more.

Yes, you need to have a knowledgeable person read your work as there are many errors, the most distracting being the homophones. Here are just a few of the ones I noticed:

shutter - shudder

hole - whole

thrown - throne

grown - groan

heals - heels

guarder - garter

presents - presence

Keep writing!

Very cool story, I hope you write more

I really liked this story.

Keep writing and thank you.

Enjoyed the overall story and had to read each page. The errors in spelling and other errors would have made a smoother read. I hope you continue to write and I will read, Thank you for the entertainment.

An interesting story of youth developing and overall excellent quality throughout only spoiled by the grammatical errors especially homophones. The diary was a great idea though I expected to see more of her Gram.

Great start, hope to read more of your stories before too long. 5 ⛤

Excellent story! Spelling issues pulled me out of the story in places and a good editor would help with that. Still I give you five stars. I would like to see a sequel.

An excellent story! Terrible (lack of) proofreading! Spelling, homophones, quotation marks misplaced. It's otherwise such a well-told tale, it's a shame to be jarred out of immersion in it by errors. Sometimes the writing seemed so 'literate' and then there'd be some glaring screw-up. Tch, tch. (Wagging finger Bitmoji here)

Dr beulahthebrit; Excellent start to your story, as other's have pointed out, spelling and grammar needs work, a bit more proof-reading maybe, I found printing it out onto paper, then reading and correcting mistakes help. Liked how every person in the story was developed. Please post the next part ASAP.

Cute story. Reminds me of high school.