by branwell
I gave you a "five". Good story that showed effort. I saw a few mistakes, but otherwise well written. I assume you have previously submitted to an editor, who is doing a decent job but missing a few things. Not to woory, mistakes just stand out to me.
I liked it! Between editing and writing I don't normally have the opportunity to read and comment. This was entirely random.
You're good, keep writing!
Young man from England flies to Texas to meet a girl he has been corresponding with for some time. After an initial uneasiness they hit it off and eventual come together to enjoy long awaited sexual activities. Good Read.