All Comments on 'Von Estate Stories'

This story had real potential. Instaed it turned out to be a tease of what it could have been. It would have been enjoyable to for the reader to see what happened to Kevin/Kathy in those few hours Michelle and James spoke. Assuming "stock wat" meant "stuck what," what did Alexis stick the data cable with a needle into? And a little back story on Michelle's operation, why the FBI was after her, as well as revealing if Amanda once was in Kathy's predicament, all would have been great set up. Redemption could come with a second chapter. I hope you consider it.