All Comments on 'Waif'

Wow stunning story....

Absolutely incredible..... What a great story...

Five amazing stars... Because that's all they allow...

Cagivagurl.

Wow, wow, wow! That was a banger from the first word. Love the redemption of the girl who never got a break. She finally got one and made the most of it. Sometimes all we need is a chance. The best story I've read in a long long time. You are the queen of hopeless romantics, Miss Randi.

Laughed, cried, popped a boner and ended with a stupid looking smile on my face. What a great hour that was. Five stars.

One of your best stories!

5

I love the story. I think you should have follow up chapter. AAAAAA++++++

That is one of the sweetest and hottest stories ever!

That was one of the sweetest and hottest stories ever!

Another +5 story

Beautiful story, Randi! Thank You!

I pretty much love All your stories, this one is simply awesome. 5 Stars and away I go.

What a beautiful story

He let her drive his lexus LFA!!!!!!!

Sorry,but you lost me there...

No matter what genre blackrandl1958 writes in she always writes a winner. 5*

Always, always, the very best stories. I eagerly read everything this author puts out. Can't wait for the next story!

I have said this before. It is such a nice warm anticipatory feeling when I log onto Lit and see a new story from Randi. This one did not disappoint. Great characters.

Tight well developed story. Kept my interest right up to the end.

A beautiful story, plain and simple. Great characters.

Hooked

I love the story! Part of me wants another part the other doesn't. only you can make that decision.

Great story, great characters. I'd look forward to reading a sequel.

Life can be sooooo. good!!

Very good story. Couldn’t put it down

Enjoyable tale. A bit long, but even those extraneous parts were good. Certainly deserving of a five-star rating.

Once again, you made me cry, you made laugh, you made me slightly horny (I'm an old fart). Not a fan of some the (I guess) text speak drifting in, but Imma gonna always read your stories - hella a writer! There needs to be more stars available for the truly gifted writers on this site. All 5, as usual with you. Ma'am, I love your work. RKC

Nice, predictable but nice love story.

Another great story, Thank you.

I think your best ever.

Feel-just-a-little-too-good story. In hindsight, it was all sorted once he got her into his truck and she escaped gas station food poisoning (turns out to be the only thing I was worried about). I especially missed Maia's mom's story (Ilovedhershesdeadkthxbye waitwut) and the truck job was a bit too easy, too (I worked for building contractors. Someone would've given the little new girl grief. Trust me). He really would not fish in water she was swimming in, but the visuals (otter <3) were awesome all the same (as usual). Good use of slang except "I'm boutta to have". All in all: skilled writing, easy on the brain, companionable characters and I'm good with happy endings being telegraphed. No regrets, would read part II, 4/5.

What a nice surprise, a Randi tale at the top of the list! Great story but still can't top 'Someone To Love Us' or 'Turn the Page", those are in a class of their own. Still earns a 5! Thank you.

somewhere east of Omaha

WONDERFUL STORY, AS ALWAYS! Please keep writing, maybe even a part 2 to this story!

bravo, now for part 2......love this story and characters.

Well done! 5

A great read

I have been following you for 5 years, and each story is excellent. I always know where you are going, your story line is never rushed but a gradual buildup which makes the ending more believable.

I' kinda like 67 racer good story hate it's ending . Thanks for the read 4*'s btw

txcracker

As usual you win the name competition, Maia, Talley, Rogers... Also, a well told tale. Your tone was all over this one. 5* from me.

Wonderful as always.

Good story!

We’ll done!

Perfect, sweet feel-good story. Well done.

I liked it, four stars (you would have five if it weren’t for the crack about country music).

I do a daily refresh to see what "my authors" have just released. You are one of three authors that will make me pause reading a story from another author to dive into yours. Yeah, your work is that damn good. Thank you for sharing. Now where in the heck is that 10-star button...

You're one of my favorite authors, this story is an example of why that's so.

Great story. Very moving and touching. Thanks for the read.

I could see a second chapter down the line...

oh god i need an epilogue so badly lol, i loved it

You’re simply an amazing writer. Beautiful story.

Very good story.

long but loved it

Beautiful story. Lovely characters skillfully developed. Top=notch writing. Remarkable sensitivity. 5 perfect stars.

feel good love story

I really like your style of writing. This was a great story. Good enough detail to understand the point you tried to make without excruciating minute details that border on being boring. Thank you for writing and sharing. Much love and respect.

A well thought-out tale. Loved all the characters. Four stars.

Wonderful, a tad concerned that she was so young but cannot remember if you gave his age but as his sister was 27 he could have been slightly older, say, 30 plus so not an issue. No idea what dialect?? Maia was talking such as her use of "Imma" but loved her.

5⛤

Beautiful.

This was a very well written, heart tugging romance. Full score from me (and almost everyone else, it seems.) Great story.

Another fine story by Randi - slightly redolent of one of her earlier stories, “Something I Could Live With”. 5* as per usual

Loved this story. Thanks for writing it. I really needed this heart-warming story in my day, and you came through. Thanks you!!!

It's odd what triggers man has, l was loving the story when the references to ASU and Arrowhead Grill made me pause, eaten there a dozen times over the years. l miss living in the Valley of the Sun. As always good work Randi

Great story as per your usual!!! As to my usual, more of these characters please!!!

I realize you seldom do sequels but you have set the groundwork for an equally riveting romance to follow. You were very gentle with Anna.....

Another excellent tale! No wandering off in unnecessary directions - not that I anticipated any .

You could have added more words, but not necessarily any more meaning or emotion.

Looking forward to your next story, and may take a break from new stories to re-read your whole list.

Awesome story n i really like the longer stories the generaly have more substance to them. Great job kno ur hard work is enjoyed and appreciated

Damnnnn that was great, I need a sequel, like, yesterday! 5 stars!

Another winner from a fantastic author. I especially liked how the last paragraph put a bow on the package! Strong finish.

Loved it and thanks for the effort you put in to make it a perfect human interest story.

'You can go home again' is my benchmark of excellence for blackrandl1958.

But that's a bit unfair, I guess.

All positive comments and only 10 anonymous inputs. That says it all.

I realize this is just a story, but what a story, and was wondering how Rodgers was able to stay at home all that time when Maia first moved in? He never went in to work then like he did after she started working there. The other thing that made me wonder, was how did Rogers hang onto his company during the divorce, normally half will go to the ex-wife. Still, I really enjoyed reading the story and gave it all five stars. Thanks.

Another Randi special I thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you!!!!

Very well written and great character development. It could easily end here but I can also see a couple options for further chapters. Thank you again.

Lovely story, Randi! There good character development along the way, with Anna being the one that surprised me most. I like how she came to terms with the situation and her decision at the end. The suggestion at the very end sets up a nice chapter 2 if you want to go that route but I think it's great as you left it. Great work, 5*.

bravo

*****

Will there be a "Waif"" 2????

Excellent character and story development and progression. One of the best stories of human-kindness and love I've ever read. Peach is pictured as brilliant but life has thrown so many problems across her path that she became some sort of punching bag in a rough world and the cops just add to her problem until Dax lends a helping hand. So far, this story has become an excellent springboard for a follow-up where she graduates with her engineering degree, becomes a mother, gets involved directly in Dax business, etc. Thx for this story.

To me, this is worth two rating scales of 5* each end to end. Did I say I loved this story?

BJ

I would like to see a little further down the line. Good story. 5*

This is the third time I've read this story since it posted. I am obsessed! I'm hungry for a chapter two, but I know you don't do chapter 2s. I have trouble believing how satisfied I feel after I read this. It should be at the top of the list of great stories on Literotica.

Great story from the very beginning

Another fine lesson on how to develop a story, flesh out characters and engage your readers Ms 1958.

I noticed that you weren’t posting on that other site lately, and then realized that you (or someone) had pulled your library. Glad I found you here, and really glad that I now have a long list of your work to catch up on. I did really enjoy the sponsored by invitation events you put on though, so I will miss those.

Une touchante histoire de générosité et d'amour nous est contée ici avec tact et dignité. Merci a vous Randi

While the stories are quite different, I noticed a certain similarity to Castles, a single, or soon-to-be-single, white father figure with a mixed-race younger woman, who enter a sexual relationship. Not a criticism, just an observation.

What a fantastic love story. I really enjoyed it.

I enjoy your stories. Wish life were that simple.

Well done! Could have been in LW as well but it is author choice. The age difference wasn’t that large from my guess (I don’t recall a number for MC) definitely not by Hollywood standards 😜! Good characters, dialogue and storyline and I was entertained. All boxes checked time well spent!

Please do keep writing and I will keep reading.

As normal for this type of story it was all a bit too sweet, still very reasonable but life does have things that go wrong. A five year update would have been good. How the degree may have helped the company, how Talley is doing at school, did Anna get remarried and did it fail?

[29.09.22]

Excellent story!

I liked the mention of SAINT HOTEL and streamed them until the end after your mention, good stuff - I appreciate musical mentions/recommendations in stories, which is why I note real artists/bands in my stories.

Unless I am mistaken (and I frequently am) you mentioned something to the effect that English was not your 1st language, but from all of your stories that I have read I've never caught that.

Danke for what you do!

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Lovely

A very touching story. Reading it was a breathe of fresh air. I appreciated the lack of agonizing drama. 👍🏻⭐️🌟⭐️🌟⭐️

Really well written. Great character development and dialogue. 5-stars.

Great story. You are a superb writer. It was just the right length to tell the story and opens the door to subsequent chapters to see how their lives developed, should you choose to do so, and I like others hope you do.

Roger's mother Kristen was like a bitch when Maia came into the family!! Talley has more brains than her.

Sweet story

applesauce!

I bet I have those Rick and Morty boxers. 3rd time I’ve read it. Outstanding as always!

Truly exceptional. I can really empathize with what Anna was feeling at the end giving up Talley…my parents divorced the summer before I went into 4th grade and Mom got custody of me. I was miserable and by the summer between 6th and 7th grades she gave custody to my dad. Hardest thing she ever did, and it was both the best thing and worst thing to ever happen to me…I learned what a parent’s love was and I learned that the grass wasn’t greener with my dad.

It was good and then at the end

BANG- the myth of the hymen rears it's ugly head. Why the stupid notion that there is a membrane to rupture? Why do influential writers such as Randi support the idea that women should feel pain when having sex? That men do right by stabbing a woman on the threshold to gain adult experience (aka losing virginity) with their election? Know this: the hymen is bit of soft tissue around the vagina, not a membrane to pierce. Slow penetration is better for the inexperienced. The perceived block is likely muscles tense from nervousness. Do better next time.

Five *, but that just isn't enough. Great build-up, plus great storytelling, as usual. Another great story from a great author.

Great story Randi, but why the repost?

Excellent read, great build up and finish for chapter 1. Chapter 2?

I think they should invite the cops to their wedding.

I also think a bun in the oven at the wedding would be great.

Another wonderful story....Thank you Randi...*5*

I just hope that your life is as joyful as your prose. May we all have love like this.

Paul

Great story, hope to see a follow on