All Comments on 'Waking Up in Vegas'

I wish that was me! Please write more

what a start! this just calls for a continuation! <3

Wow!!! Incredible Vegas story....More!...More!...More!

If you write a story about a cheerleader on a free trip to the world cheerleading championships, winning 5 million dollars, and obtaining a sex slave, you should at least add in the story about how she accomplished it while she was drunk, so that your story seems to flow better. And especially the events that led her to chop off her hair and end up in bed with a naked sex slave. Other than that it is a great story

As I've said before, you write perfect story scenes. I just wish this was part of a larger, more detailed story. Still worth reading tho!

The story was great, I really enjoyed the story line. I usually don't like sex slave stories, but this wasn't extreme bondage or anything like that, so it was a enjoyable story. I loved the characters, and the chemistry between the two. I would definatly love to see a continuation of this story.

what happens in vegas can leave vegas wit u if u got the money

All I can say is MORE!

wonderful! It is an interesting change of perspective for you, as well, I imagine, having the mind control already have taken place. You must have spent quite a bit of time coming up with this scenario. I wonder if there is a "Keiko" series in the offing? Good luck in your future stories. This was marvelous. Thanks.

Mmm, this was such a sexy story.~ ^_^ :D

Great story. Not trying to critisize or be mean but it needs more sex!!!

i know it has been a long time but id love to know how Jennie and Jennie (unworthy slut ) have gotten on

I believe this story has a lot of potential. I would like to see if Jennie remembers any more of her night of gambling or if the Yakuza tries to get revenge.

Please continue the story.

This story is ripe with avenues you could take. She could decide too finish her education. So then she and kieko would need to come up with a plausible story about kieko tagging along. But with all that money she and her cohort can expand their imaginations. Think about it. 😘

I've read this story countless times over the last eight years, and it still makes my giggle every time.

This little yarn puts The Hangover to shame. You so accurately paint the picture of Jennie’s confusion at waking up in a strange hotel room, sharing a bed with an equally strange but beautiful woman.

You artfully unpack her memory of how she came to be there, accompanied by the transition of her emotions from confusion to disbelief. “Things like this don’t happen to people like me.”

Then you explore the final evolution: from disbelief to acceptance. As Jennie finally connects the dots with Keiko’s help, along with an orgasm to ease the transition, she becomes open to a future outside of the constraints of her previous life with Keiko as a bonus. You give us access to her thoughts and can feel Jennie’s post-orgasm contentment as her new life comes into focus.

I know you rarely do follow ups but seeing Jennie attend her tenth high school reunion accompanied by Keiko and her success would be so cool 😎 just to read your description of the reaction of her former cheerleading teammates.

Last note: you are the best short form writer on this website—full stop 🛑 and this one is in my personal top five of all the stories that you have written. Your economy of language is without peer.