All Comments on 'Waste Mangement'

Much better that your other stories

Gimme a sequel

This story is in dire need of an editor.

That's it? Where's the rest of the story? ****

Reverse BTB!

5

discreet - confidential, secret

discrete - separate, individual

he open up

I got so greed

Simple mistakes like that stand out even more in a short story like that.

This story was wonderful. It seems like the wife knew at that last instant what she had thrown away and now had to live with the fact her affair was not as special to her lover as she thought. I know why the story is short and sweet but to see the future would be great too! Thanks for a wonderful story.

Liked the angle but there are so many questions. Is this all a set up? What happens next? How long were they married , and are their kids involved? (Doesn’t sound like it) 4*

It's inexplicable where the decent scores are coming from. This author is either blatantly careless, or nearly illiterate (can't even get a two-word story title right). A lot of other mistakes as well, for such a short story. 2 stars

Fun short story. Nice to see somebody give this type of story a new approach.

Is the cup is half full or half empty ?

nice fresh take on cheating wife being found out and confronted. more to this story or just a 1 off

See Spot. See Spot run. This sounded like a beginners reader for cryin out loud. The prose of supposed conversations was immature and juvenile, but wait, it's just another skippy story. Silly me, what did I expect? In reality, not much, what I got was less. 1/5

That was very good.

great story skippy

i like the message you sent to all the cheaters out there

NO MATER HOW SMART YOU THINK YOU ARE

THERE IS ALWAYS SOMEONE SMARTER THAN YOU !!!!!

5* 1000 hardons and a very very satisfying orgasm

Skippy skipped editing. Then the ending?

Interesting story concept. Would have liked another chapter of what the husband thought when he got the divorce papers. Definitely enjoyed the bitch's turnaround facing the music. Thanks Sk742

Forget the simple mistakes and take the story as it is. Some people live to be critics.

Many editing mistakes. Once again you got into a rush to crank out a story. So much more here to tell. You turned what you should develop into a decent story and dropped it on the ground asnot even a short story but a simple scene. Talk about 'waste management'.

I'll only give you 3 stars for this meager effort

An interesting take on an old storyline. However it could do with some fleshing out with a prequel on what lead up to this and a sequel for what happened after. I give the idea 4****

Perfect…… please don’t listen to those asking for more. It would be like trying to paint a perfect Rose blossom. A waste of time and doomed to failure

Many go cheat thinking it will be better and some may think it . The sneaking, illicitness of it , the different variety of man and dick but when reality sets in and caught 9 out of 10 will regret it

In a nutshell! A well told story that suits my taste!

That last line made zero sense, and 'mangement' is not a word. It sounds like a treatment for a dogs skin disease. But, the story had a different twist to it, and that I appreciate.

A less than Subtle dose of reality for the selfish wife delivered by a woman who clearly understands what is important in a relationship.

Good job S47. Your critics are bothered by the technical errors, not the story line. I think you’re one of the most interesting writers in LW these days. Perhaps a bit more attention to editing would help, but it does not overshadow your creativity.

A part 2 is definately in order. I have to agree with the previous comments; the gramatical and spelling errors detract from an otherwise good story.

For something so short this raises a lot of issues. This woman is using blackmail to force a divorce, but I imagine everything will come out in said divorce anyway, so where is her leverage? Also it seems unlikely that he and the other woman really haven't already done the dirty, so any advantage is gone. Having said that I thought it was entertaining despite how brief it was, but my final impression was he should divorce the cheating slut, then regarding the other woman, tell her thanks but no thanks and get as far away from the scheming bitch as possible.

It is a fantasy. A classy rich 10 with the big boobies is always waiting at the wings to pluck up our extraordinary victims.

We rarely see the women interact in stories, so well done there and you are one of my favorite authors despite the salt.

You surprisedme with your brevity. Still, I believe it was a fun (albeit short) read. Truthfully, I can't think of why it should be longer.

A nice idea. D

Not much to this storyline; more like a rather like a poorly contrived morality play.

This isn't a story, it is what would be under the label of "FOREWORD" or "PRELUDE" in a real story.

It feels like your just schlocking a story out to put one out.

"They were not blurry, and they certainly not nuanced." One of about 100 simple, easy to fix, but 'too much trouble to bother' mistakes make this story even less credible than it would have been if the grammar and spelling turned out perfect. It's really not going anywhere, even without all the mistakes to distract your readers. So, this story is in dire need of an editor *and* a believable plot.

Good spin but felt the story was incomplete but that can be said with most LW stories so the reader can use their own imagination.👍

When it comes to sex: men need a place but women need a reason. So if shes cheating, the question is why.

Good…not great.

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4 ****

Best line I have seen in a long time:

"I don't care that much how the package is wrapped as I am what's in the package"

Words to live by...

D

Good Story, Skippy, but too short for the interest that you generated with this plot.

3***

Interesting conversation. Not spectacular, but still interesting idea.

I gave you **** BUT try reading your stories out loud to catch glaring edit issues.

Yes, it wasn't perfectly edited. Yes it will leave those with no imagination wanting a sequel. But how about congratulating the author on a pretty unique story line and having the guts to put the results of their efforts out for crucifixion.

Well done, Skip, I for one loved it.

agree with Phoenix about the wonderful last line. Well done no nitpicking here

Awesome short story. Someone who can appreciate a good guy takes a cheating whore to school. And as in most cases, just another sleezy notch on a slimeballs belt, nothing special. It's just sex hahaha.

too short.

but very good.

thanks Skippy47

Sounds like a dog with a skin problem!

Hoping for part 2! Why else add the bit about needing two days to decide?

Great concept.

Hooked

All-caps anonymous, please get back on your blood pressure meds. We don't want you having a coronary on us.

Interesting germ of a story, and I liked the conversation, but I think it could be more developed, and the story would be better for it.

Interesting little snippet.

Amazing!

A BTB story that is worth reading.

Loved it Skip, the entitled bitch got hers.

5/5

“I got so greed I saw him as waste to manage."

First of all, it’s painful how you had to steer so hard to get back to ‘waste management’ for the big ending, making any hope of a strong ending turn mediocre.

Speaking of big endings… “I got so greed?”

Just one letter took it from mediocre to a complete dud.

The natives are restless. One ANON one-bombed you because he/she/it asserts LW is Cuck Central and not about 'one-way cheating sex'. Wow.

This is simply a neatly-written, imaginatively-plotted, entertaining read! Easily 5/5!!!

This was painful to read. The dialogue was forced, stilted and not believable.

Short but rather unlikely, so 2 stars.

Certainly pushed the limit on suspension of disbelief.

The poor anon below with this idiocy "LW is supposed to be about a loving husband sharing his wife or a loving couple having extramarital sex with other loving couples"

You mean homosexual men being cucked, and rarely are their loving couples having sex with other couples...the majority of the garbage here is the cuck shit you spank you wee meat to junior. And the fact that it got your panties twisted says way more about you than you realize.

Thinking of Tik Tok I found my words for comment 🤔

"How fucked up is fucked up & She's fucked up" 5 🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟

That dumb anon saying LW is supposed to be a sharing or swinging genre. Just hang yourself

All the makings of a truly good short story torpedoed by horrible or nonexistent editorial control. Please get an editor and a proof reader.

Please write another chapter. For a woman having a husband as he's been described, she is a foolish, cheating, slut. Please continue, to see if she changes and he accepts it. The other lady recognizes how special he is, but only time, and the author will tell... WONDERFUL STORY FROM A TERRIFIC WRITER!!

Great plot then left us hanging it feels incomplete without an ending. Maybe a part 2 is in the works

Interesting, "Anonymous" telling us what Loving Wives is supposed to be about. If you had bothered reading the category description, it is purposefully vague.

Skippy47, good tweak on the LW genre. Original and innovative. Too rushed, it needs more editing, not one of your best, but better than most others,

Only one paragraph fell apart, the one where the classy woman tells the cheating wife why she wants the cheater's husband.

Good job; I enjoy short, tight stories. Agree with others on the editing though. Word spell-check, read aloud, and Grammarly add-on should have caught them all. Worst is the typo in the title: Mangement?

I would love to see to see a part two where the wife has an Ohio style Ari level epiphany. And then fights back against another self-absorbed, self-important, entitled and arrogant woman who thinks that money allows her to manipulate and get what she wants. If the husband falls for this, god help him! There are many ways this could play out, especially if your protagonist here has her own formidable skill set and will. You can do a LOT in two days. You have set up an interesting premise for a story. The last line is a tad clumsy, I think, e.g, the typo, the fact it is carrying too much weight for what it is trying to convey since you can feel the next thought—whatever it is—wants to be stated. Where will it go? What is that next thought?

All cheated on spouses should be so lucky

Wow that’s different. A bitch burning a cheating bitch. Good one!

Different way to write a good LW story. Great job

You have a knack for writing characters that are interesting and who compel our reading on. That may be why so many calls for another chapter pop up in your comments. Your plot is done, but your characters are still speaking to us!

Thanks for writing!

Great angle. *****

Good story no ending.

3 stars - great plot but once again, where is the rest of this story?

4. Was tempted to give it a 5 but it annoys me when there are such interesting stories without a payoff or proper ending. Abrupt endings aren't enjoyable.

Average story.

Reading this, I feel like I've read the outline for a killer story. 4 Stars, but I WANT to give it 5. Maybe a rewrite, that includes a massive expansion?

Cute story.

Thanks for your writing.

Incomplete

I like it very much but would love a second part. What happened after the divorce.

Good one but needs a follow up

Would have liked to see it play out...

Short and sweet. No need to prolong it - apart from caring for the Hard of Thinking

wish her better luck in the future, hopefully she has learned her lesson

The writing is crisp and clear. Great premise. I wish the writer or someone else would develop it more.

Uh, considering where I hang out, and the "Ladies" I know - I would expect Dana to be pulling hair and scratching eyes out in the first couple of minutes of this little chit-chat.

"I saw him as waste to manage." Then why did she want to stay married to him? Why did she marry him in the first place? We don't keep waste in the house, let alone sleep with it, we flush it down the toilet. Clever line, but nonsense.

When I completed reading the tale I was expecting to see many demands in the comments to the effect that it is incomplete. I was not disappointed. But the tale is not. It is a great Goldilocks story, not to long and not too short. Eight out of five stars at least.

The better woman won, and the cheating bitch lost.