All Comments on 'Watching Mom in the Garden'

Looking forward to the next Chapter. Thanks for sharing.

damned hawt

loved it

But that second page was a tease

It seems to rushed, like there should be something in the middle of the story sucking me into the story. It just seemed extremely rushed. One second her interest in her son is growing and the next second she is taking off her pants for him. There just doesn’t seem to be enough there to justify the conclusion

Great start!

But you really need an editor. The mistakes distract from your narrative.

Forget all these so-called experts. Just write what is in your heart and what is on your mind. I love incest, especially mom-son sex and you did a great deal for me. I got hard as soon as I began reading and I stayed hard the rest of the story. Thank you so much.

The only thing I can say, is really? Page two is just to be continued? Very clever.

No reluctance or build up in tension, just straight into raunchiness.

Iam ready to pop, and you pull the plug. That's not fair, please come back soon with part2. Thanks for the read

need part 2 cock is so hard

Finish this soon and I'll rate!!!

DT

One of the more enticing and erotic starts I've read. I LOVE reading about seeing mom bent over in the garden, showing off a nice butt.

But...the "Continued" on Page 2 was total, absolute bullshit!