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by Willingtoshare

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AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago

Great story, more please!

AnonymousAnonymousover 5 years ago
Could use some editing

Could use a little work on some things like grammar, but the storytelling is pretty solid and very sexy. This has good bones, and I'd like to see how it continues.

vanmyers86vanmyers86over 5 years ago

Given that this is your second try at writing a story, you've done quite well! I spotted a couple of basic issues here and there, but in general, it flows well and your description of the buildup and actual sex is quite lovely.

If you want to discuss further, feel free to PM me. Otherwise, well done and keep writing!

Van

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
Fantastic.

Loved this and the idea!! Yes, it could do with some editing but that didn't spoil the reading for me and I enjoyed it very much.

So many directions this could go and I would be excited to see where and watch it unfold.

Hope to see more in the future.

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Just another horny straight guy trying to get his kicks in life. Bit of an exhibitionist, bit of a flirt and a bit of well... only time will tell. Read a lot of stories on here so thought I'd give it a shot myself and see where it goes. http://forum.literotica.com/showthre...