by daddygoesdeep
The husband should not seek revenge because he nailed Ashley. So he is no better then them in my opinion
Or even want to get married? If a wife does this then who needs enemies?
not a bad story, wish it was longer, and didn't switch between first and third person, made it confusing.
I want to see more of this, but you need a lot of work on the punctuation. Trying to figure out who was saying what and what was being said and wasn't being said ruins the joy of reading it. I recommend you find an editor before posting the next installment. And that goes for all of your stories.
What exactly was going on in this story? The wife actually tried to get the husband to go to the party. What was she going to say when they got there? "Did I say costume party? Doh! I meant costume orgy." It would actually make more sense if she was doing it behind his back.
Your writing would be so much better if you knew how to use quotation marks. It really ruins the story.
I can see the husband never wanting to touch the wife again after what he saw, and in the next few days her getting divorce papers!