All Comments on 'Weird Kid's First Time'

For a first submission, I found it pretty good. You might want to have someone check your grammer, but otherwise keep writing!

And you, Anonymous, should check your spelling - part of grammAr, you know.

That really does happen that way,,,,lol. not bad for the first attempt,,,,

not a bad first submission but you might want to look into getting an editor. Don't let negative comments get you down :)

It has a certain breathless energy, and I could overlook the misc grammatical & typographical errors, but the slippage between past and present tense jarred. The latter is always a hard act to pull off, and I'd really only recommend it for situations when the author is describing a fantasy to the object of his or her sexual intentions. Anyhow, welcome aboard; it might be worth getting an editor (or at least running your fiction by a reliable friend) whilst you find your feet.

It's not unknown for girls without birth control to offer anal sex as a 'safe' alternative. Welcome to 2012.

No guy (on this list, anyway) can admit to having less than a 7 inch dick - although repeated studies have shown that the median is between 5.5 and 5.75 inches. A 7 inch dick is rare.

No matter. Here is a virgin who with no experience (great natural aptitude, I guess) can bring a girl to orgasm with cunnilingus and then has extended anal intercourse (no lube, naturally) Eighteen year old virgins are notorious for how fast they come - they tend to recover faster than older guys, so there is a bit of a trade-off - but still - all there stories are fantasies, but some, like this one, are over the top

The comment that too many authors consider no story complete without anal intercourse is right - too bad, too. A more interesting story would have been how she wasn't on the pill, so she agreed to blow him, and then decided to let him fuck her so long as he pulled out, and then he came too fast, and so then she did him again as soon as he got hard et cetera

And this bit about not being on the pill - safe sex isn't just about birth control - most sexually active girls carry condoms - and if she weren't she would explain that fact to the guy - not that she wasn't on the pill. I would guess from this glitch the author stopped having casual sex thirty years ago (pre-AIDS, in other words) or hasn't started.

Since you have other negitive comments to consider, I'll leave you with a good one. I agree with the bit about him making her cum with out any experance but I do beleive you are off to a fine start.

Please take the positive out of the other comments and keep writing. Anal is not all that al the time.

Please write more!

Two of my friends had their cherry popped when they were 12. I was considered a late bloomer and lost mine at 14 to a classmate. I wasn't on the pill and he didn't use any protection either. I suppose that we were just lucky. But 18 and still a virgin? Must be quite a laughing stalk!!

No doubt written by a horny high school kid with no sex skills. Has no idea about sex.

Please make more