All Comments on 'Welcome to Paradise Pt. 01'

Great start and can’t wait for more...

I can’t wait to read more of this island adventure

Get an editor. Stay in the same tense. ' ='s foot ... " ='s inch .... did these girls really have 6 foot cocks?

Just a bit rough in punctuation and grammar. Literotica has a great Free Editors utility for submitters. You should take advantage of it because the story is good. You just need to polish the grammar a bit. Thanks for writing.

I with everyone else definitely can't wait.💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖

And it even grew to 9 feet of cock. This is an amazing place.

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Great story ,well done

Your grammar could use some work, but the story was very hot. I can't wait to read more!

Pleaseum back and add some more installments! This was SO hot!

I have similar comment to other's: grammar, tense, foot instead of inches, some breaks in continuity.

take advantage of proof readers and style editors.

liked the story.

Good first story. Could the grammar be better and would you benefit from a proof reader? Sure. For me you have a creative idea that’s hot, expressed well and worthy of a second instalment. I say bravo to you.

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Part 2, Please 🙏 👍👍👍💖💖💖💖💖💋💋💋💋