by FanFunatic
The feel of this work is wonderful. Contrasting Drip-fed the sharp freshness in the characters lives is very much refreshing.
Really enjoying this! First time I've had to wait weeks, but very worthwhile. <3
As always I enjoy this story. This chapter felt a little rushed in its hurdling towards completion of the arc. It was nonetheless very exciting. Hard to understand what Karitas actually is. It is still only vaguely talked about in this chapter. Hopefully it will become clearer when he can actually tell the others who and what he is. Looking forward to the next chapter. Hope the story continues past this book. Keep up the good work.
I like what you are doing with this, even if your explanation of Karitas' existence is a bit sketchy -- You take him down to a one dimensional being who can also contemplate himself from outside of the dimension. Interesting but confusing and a bit incoherent. The part about his mother, the mystery of his existence and not the term "dreamborne" introduced before we really even understand "neverborne."
I know the interactions between the members of this Anomalia will be hot as fuck, but I will look forward to you filling in the plot holes you have developed here. I like this story quite a bit. Please accept my criticism in the manner it is offered -- a fan of your story telling looking forward to your continuing evolution.