All Comments on 'What a Cliché This Is!'

Short and sweet!

5

Appreciate the effort but too many gaps for me. How did he end up drugged and taped to a chair? How was he going to carry out his threats in that situation? Did the father know he was duped into thinking our MC was the father of his daughter's lost child? Where did she go if Kyle was married with children and her father knew she was cheating? 3.4*

How's he gonna kill them while taped to a chair? D

Agree with demander's question, otherwise I like his response.

Not bad; had potential but the cage element deflating and silly.

Not realistic, but hell! Its fiction. thanks

He is saying all that while taped to a chair? Really stupid scenario.

wasnt bad but needed a lot to fill in. and filing for abandonment cannot be done in a month you have to wait at least a year in almost every state

Good start

Short and sweet, decent flash story. Hard to get a 5 star from me on any flash story due to the brevity, but I thought it deserved 4 stars, so good job.

10 big Blazing stars for this nice effort. Thanks TopSpot for the time you invested in this story for us.Buster2U

Sweet but not happening to much of a fantasy to be believed. The l fact that her father was a “ hood “ is not believable. Not real even in a fantasy.

This has been a bad day for new stories. 1*

A flat btb, as often happens they are short, flat and sonehow unfinished. Not bad, not good.

Excellent way to put a whore in her place.

Too abrupt

lots of gaps in the storyline

To demander: people like the soon to be ex wife and affair guy are cowards. It's why they only confronted him after he was strapped to a chair. They don't think to themselves , "you're powerless to do anything to us tied to a chair." They are playing the role of badass, but are pampered and insecure people. Right now affair guy and wife both know her father knows about the two of them as well. That mat be a more logical answer for you. But they are also cowards. You'd be surprised at how much fear over rides logic. I've personally used fear to bluff my way outta scraps. Because I don't care if I die or if I kill someone. And even stupid pampered people have enough animal instinct to read that. You'd be surprised at how much people are still ruled by instincts.

Haha super short story. They met, fucked, pregnancy, forced married, miscarriage, cheater, cuck, father hates cheaters, Lisa runs away with asswipe, John graduates files for divorce and leaves town. That’s amazing 750 word short story!

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Not bad for a 750. But still three stars for an Average tale.

JPB

The author TOLD you morons up front it was a 750 word story! Your comments display a lack of intelligence, not to mention self control.

How dumb can you be?

OK for an outline, but you really need to flesh it out. Nothing but the bone of an unsatisfactory submission.

Not too bad for a 750 word effort, but it leaves a lot out that could have and should have been said to finish the damn story.

Sorry but it just did not add up.

Poorly written, poorly titled, and poorly tagged. Congratulations???

1 star - total waste of time.

Better luck with your next attempt.

Have a nice day and happy 2024.

Even for a brief cliché I enjoyed it good job

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Liked that, but it was too short.

Short and sweet and the ending actually wraps it up

nicely.

For a 750 word story it was pretty good. Covered a lot of ground.

Not much of a story to be honest, too short and contrived. Among other things the dad wouldnt let asswipe live.

Just way too fast. Definitely not your best.

3/5

Well, short but I found when it was done I had no reaction whatsoever. so I guess it was a short waste of time...

Kind of weird and awkward. So some woman shows up claiming pregnancy and this punk wimp marries her out of fear for his life? Oh, right: self defense bad, submitting to bullies legitimate. The whole world is better off this ass wipe has no kids, yet. And Catholic fathers frequently have to coerce their whore daughters to marry somebody when they get knocked up. Just a typical everyday life sort of story. Absurd.

Almost useless, just an empty tale.

Well, the title's right.

I did find it amusing though. Thank you!

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Be well!

Even if the story was formulaic, I really liked it, being able to imagine the some of the dialogue not depicted. We

were warned with the title anyway.

Take no notice of those who say it was only an outline. Whatever you do don’t write anything this bad again.

As everyone knows, I respect a well-done 750-word story (since I haven't perfected that art yet) so... kudos, 5*. Well done!

Doesn’t have to be a masterpiece, as long as he fucks up the 4 assholes and dumps the cheating bitch.

Great story fives

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Short and to the point,,,can't beat that with stick☺

I gave it a 3 and that was a struggle. Made no sense.

So only Catholics disapprove of cheaters?

I didn't expect such a shitty short story from you.

Umm unfinished skeleton of a story.

Hee hee hee