by lostcrusader11
For a part 1 of a story, I thought it was a bit fast. Stories, like life, require a bit of mental foreplay for it to be arousing. Part 1 or a Chapter 1 should be about character development and a bit of a tease. My thoughts.
Excellent concept, definitely should explore a little more into the build up of their sexual relationship. Definitely should also try and push it to actual sex, this is great incest potential
Good idea though I suspect English is not your native language. An editor would help. I like their open lust for each other. I hope he gets to fuck her soon.
finally a story that reads the way my mind works. Not going through the mom shocked by sons suggestion of family play and just offers up the things desired without trauma and anxiety like most stories do..
Dimmu_Borgir: What a dumb way to write a story.
lostcrusader11: I know, but I'm a retard that has no writing skills.
It becomes a question of "who's the least talented" with the bar set REALLY low.