All Comments on 'What I Saw in the Room'

This could off been a great story but spoiled it with some weak make that lets his family gets used story no if he protected her so much he wouldn't of let that stand. Write something proper instead of a weak little baby dribble.

wast of time don't read. another bull shit story

not finished and no point to the story

This chapter appears to be a long introduction... wanna see more of this story evolve.

Three stars is high for this story and only because I want it better. I sit here and think a two might have been better. I come here to feel good not depressed. The boy, and that is what he is - a little boy, might as well move out and start his own life. Stop now and make us all feel better.

A sister, to stupid to live... A step-father, that needs a sledgehammer to the nuts... a brother, to weak to do it. With the ending of chapter 1, I can't think of a reason this shouldn't get just 1*.

Wtf?

No sex between blood relatives so not incest and the story sucked

Has to be a day of reckoning.

Shit. I haven't read garbage like this in a long time.

At least the written work makes sense, unlike far-wanderer's meaningless comment.

Sorry I took the time to read this. Wasted time I can never get back. What crap.

Get yo weak ass outta here

I quite liked this story. There are so many moving parts and many ways one could interpret it, plus it was Hella hot. Look forward to more, maybe a chapter 2?

More stories where a brother/son catch said and sister

Or where a wife suspects husband of cheating and catches her husband and daughter

Finish before you publish

Sounds like she likes being treated like a slut. So this is goin to be were the guy has to watch as he fuck is mom and sister I mean if you are in to that stuff bunch of sluts to me but that's if you finish the story

This is 700 types of messed up. I get cucking fetishes sure, but this is so fucking depressing.

The MC should grow some ball and beat the fuck out of step dad with a baseball bat or if he want's to act like a bitch let his step dad fuck him.

Brilliant. Much more like this please.

Absolutely brilliant. Original, hot as hell,fantastic narrative. This guy can write.The scenario is one the best on this site,it avoids all the clichés and is written with an expert touch.There is scope for so much more,will we be treated to any more journeys into your dark imagination?

Its been over a year, but I’d like to address a few things.

First, I should’ve had a better warning up top. Cuckolding is one thing, but this is clearly something more fucked up than asking someone to fuck your wife. So, thats my bad and I apologize to anyone whose jerk off session I might’ve ruined.

Second, this is where I wanted it to end, so kindly fuck off with the “finish first.” Write your own story and add as many endings as you’d like. I wanted this story to feel like a singular moment, not an overall narrative. I may write more moments with these characters, or I may not. Therefore, it’s finished for now.

Third, to anyone that enjoys this fucked up kink, and this story, I do plan on writing more. I have a lot of story ideas, but most of them require plenty of set up and plot and I just don’t have the patience. I don't know when I’ll publish again, or if I’ll continue with this story, but when I do it’ll be similar to this. Focusing more on the aspects revolving around cuckolding/netorare sex, without fully jumping in.

Happy fapping.

Hot. As. Fuck. More. Real shame some of the guys in the comments seem to have taken offense at the story. Its fiction you knuckleheads. Secondly, if you don't like it then just go read whatever else you like instead of throwing a tantrum like a whiny bitch. Diversity is the spice of life. Don't like it? Keep quiet.

I love a story like this that features corruption or forbidden pairings of some kind. The kinkiness and thrill and catching someone doing something naughty that they aren't supposed to is what I find really exciting And there's not enough of it to go around.

Just one small criticism, that the last part where the guy is debating in his head whether to expose their secret or not kind of kills the mood. Its depressing, and I personally don't see the point in putting that there. Either way, MORE PLEASE!

This needs a second chapter where the boy gives the step-father what he deserves and takes charge in the household. Damn good start. 5*

Yep. Finish it.

No comment.

Yeah, author's kind of sick. Like fr? Like, "aww nuuhh, can't make Mumzy sad." Quit living in your fantasy world. Stepdad's a dick to him, revenge is hella sweet. Mark's not gonna give a damn about how humiliated his sister is or how she's gonna be kicked out of the family by their Mom, he's gonna realize how easily it'll be to destroy Dean's life. Dean's probably gonna lose a lot - I mean, who's to say how long this has been going on? Mom's probably getting the house and I can't see Mark losing college. Nah, it's just Melissa and Dean who get fucked here. I mean get real, dude.