All Comments on 'What If ...'

Interesting like a Sherlock Holmes info gathering.

It at is funny, Ha,Ha,Ha! A few spelling or translation errors; but funny like a long build-up joke.

Her just rewards!

5

A neat little story - who knows what, except the brief affair, is true . . .

Thank you for posting it.

Liked the sentiment, but the story needs work.

And why the hell should she leave? Her name is on the lease as much as his.

Go guck yourself. Maybe if he was more of a man she wouldn’t be fucking other men.

Clever finish.

I like the idea of doing the same thing women do to men. She fell in to her own lies

Oh dear!!!

What a whore. Nice job kicking her ass to the kerb.

Story Iis brilliant! Contains all the necessaries to the explain the end of relationship in a clever way. She was hoisted on her own petard.

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whackdoodle you must be a slut as well.

Fun!

Nice try but in reality would the wife give such details? No way. She may say they didnt have sex the first time the just say once in the car or just say it never got that far.

Very creative and enjoyable read. Love when the MC gets to the point, in his own way

That was kinda funny

Thanks for making me SMIRK jmm999.

I liked that. Short and straight to the point. Nice.

Slick! 5*

I am British and use British English. I have read this 3 times and can't see any errors.

I think it is a well written, clever and funny short story.

I have also enjoyed your other clever, well written stories.

Well done and keep up the good work!

Smart move. This bitch is a cheating whore at heart and will continue to be. Clear her out if his life for a bright future.

About as good as a 750 can get!

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5 *****

Good one! When it come to women and the "truth" the "truth" is always relative.

Wackdoodle is appropriately named 🤗. Good Lord does that tool even read these stories? The tool is concerned about whether the slut’s name is on tne lease? And it’s hubby’s fault she’s a slut?

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0 *’s for this demented commenter. He and Tilan make a matched set 😎

A good short story

Nice try.

Empty. A cute mind game, I suppose, but nothing compelling, dramatic, engaging. Just another shallow distant tepid marriage based on nothing of virtue, substance, or spiritual connection. Why did they bother getting married? Who cares, right? The whole story is just about the gotcha mind game. Bland. But thanks for the effort.

That is a good quick story. Why in the world would it matter if it was a quick fling or not. If she had not been caught she never would have admitted it Kick her to the curb and move on.

Lame

You would have to be whack to doodle someone else's wife! She deserved being kicked to the curb and required to leave the home she destroyed. Maybe if she wasn't such a cheating slut, she would still have a happy home with a husband who loved her. He still owes that guy who she cheated with a good whacking! Maybe doodle his noodle with the heel of his boot! That's how a man gucks up a weasel! 5☆

Isn’t this supposed to be an erotic story site? What the fuck was this nonsense?

Sometimes you dig your own grave! 4*!

@Wha

@Whackdoodle

She should leave because she is a cunt. If she thought she wanted more of a man than him, she should have found one according to specs, otherwise suck it up, as he was her selection/decision. Ergo: a cunt is a cunt so fuck her and the high horse she is on.

Hypothetically speaking, of course.

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What’s with all these flash stories? This one was mildly interesting at best.

Whackdoodle; your name fits you! Cuck! Nice little story. 5*

5 stars. Short and sweet. Forget the negative comments. Perfect little/short story.

Slick..very slick.

That was kinda fun.

And dont listen to whackaweewee, evidently he hit his head, because I reread the story and didnt see anything about her name on the lease. I'll go read it once more....yeah nope no mention of a lease.

Starting to wonder, as do many, about whackypoodle.

Reading unattributed, untagged dialogue is painful. Yeah, I followed it, but 90% of communication is non-verbal, and writers have developed techniques to cover that over the last 800-years, or so. Dialogue like this has no soul, little emotion, nothing to 'show' the reader, and no context. It could be two disembodied heads hanging their in the ether. I tried, OP, but there was nothing there. 2/5.

Funny.

Great story about a less than bright cheating bitch. Don’t pay Whack no mind. He thinks he’s Reed Richards now.

This was different... and well done, getting a 5 !

EaatCoaster

Unlikely story but fun nonetheless. 5 for originality and for keeping it short so as not to overwork the premise.

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Always the weak ending . Asking her to pack her bags and leave. Legally wrong! Why use it. Most women and men know the law. Yet authors always seem to throw in this crappy ending. Throw the bitch out. If only it was legal to do so!

Asshole

The incels who inhabit LW just love this story

As stories go it's pretty shitty.

That was extremely dumb.

1/2 ⭐️

She tell him to get the fuck out as much as he ca. And all she needs to do is call the cops and say he hit her. Authors really should understand the real world be fore try to get cute. This doesn’t work at all.

It would seem that 26thNC can relate to the “less than bright” character as his bulb is as dim as it gets.

This was about 750 words too long.

Not my idea of a good story. My guess is that this story cold happen but to save time "just tell her to fuck off" and save the words for revenge. Next story have your cheater have an I.Q. over 50.

Oh yeah, thanks to the recent comment about 26thNC. I went and read his comment. Thanks again 26thNC for being my Front Man again. I always heed your advice and read your comment. It was a good story, so thanks 26thNC and to jmm999 for a good story. We don't like Cucks and Wimps! 5 BIG AND FAT BLAZING STARS!

Yeah, I'm lying like you were doing to me. OK, a paraphrase, but it got me chuckling. Good story 4 stars Bob

An absolutely BRILLIANT story, Just about perfect in every way! Incredibly well constructed, well written, and the ending was superb! I quite liked it; Well done, thank you!

R.S.

Well played!

Funny... that. 5 stars!

Your supposed hero doesn't really 'burn' her at all. And the guy? he gets off free and clear, pun intended. He still gets divorce court, probably gets ripped off in the process, and she really doesn't suffer at all. And if that was all lies to get her to talk, he has no idea if she was even being truthful about how many times, or how many guys, or any of it. Just a bunch of stuff that sounds like it ought to feel good, but it you wait two seconds to think about it, basically he gets nothing out of it and loses a lot. Not even close to a burn.

One of the best 750 word stories. Congrats!

One of the best 750 word stories!

Pretty smart cookie for a cuck. Too bad he's been cucked and is about to get fucked in the ass by the courts when they divorce. It really doesn't matter that he's managed to run his little game on his ex-to-be, he's still ending up a loser. However it is well written and has my vote for 4 stars.

I'm not sure what is expected in these 750 stories. The story is short pointed and light. It's not meant to be War and Peace. Some of these commentators should be thankful as they missed the point completely. I would never write in the site for the audience has to many sad little people with the attitude of "I'm going to blast a story to prove how learned I am...

I like it. The Saturday at ten story is my favorite of yours though. Love the part when Marco smashes his own face into the cake

Damn good story and a smart man.

Highly improbable, but very entertaining. The only thing worse than the hangman is when you discover you’ve hung yourself.

A good one! But still, any dumb ass who lets his wife go out drinking and dancing without him deserves all he gets.

He thinks he’s so smart when his wife is cheating on him. Go figure…

He is smart in this story . He figured it out and sent her on her way.

It doesn't get much smarter in that situation.

Sneaky bastard w/ a stupid wife. Nice combination!

What if … instead of being a smarter asshole, he had a more congenial and less adversarial relationship with his wife … maybe she would feel closer to him and wouldn’t want to cheat?

Of course not, we like our women to cheat, right fellas? Otherwise, we’d have nothing to scream, holler and whine about.

That was GREAT! 5 stars DMW aka Sumnut96

good result for him getting rid of the cheating bitch

Clever and well played. Kudos

Guy is smooth. Story brought a smile to my face.