All Comments on 'When Becky Met Bryan'

Misogynistic bullshit. Subtle, but still misogynistic bullshit.

One of the best stories I have read in years!

An amazing love story. I could feel the emotions flowing in a true way.

Amazing insight into courting and relationships.

Writing so fine it makes other stories on this site seem like they were written in crayon.

Way to go Freddie, brilliant story. Thanks for writing!

Even though FtC still doesn't understand what feminism is, story is quite good. I really like author's take on relationship dynamic throughout these stories

It's a bit shame that author is most likely a redpiller

One of the best, well-written stories I've read in a long time. Freddie, you are in a class with the really gifted writers on this site. I'm talking d q steele class!

You did an excellent job of describing love at first sight, and how it means very different things to men and women.

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Becky was awed by his confidence, his charisma, and his intelligence, that all were showcased by him "winning" the stand up competition. Then he continued to impress her with how he dealt with her juvenile date, how his colleagues all liked and respected him, and his directness with her during the drink afterwards. He basically exuded all the attractive qualities of an alpha male without being an arrogant jerkoff, and she was smitten.

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Bryan was awed by her beauty. That's pretty much all it takes for guys.

The fact that she wasn't annoying, and clearly just as into him, made him pop the question.

Very enjoyable. 5*

Surprised this isn't higher scored. No violence, cucks, or what have you. More properly a romance and that category averages much higher numbers.

Perhaps there are a bunch of closeted misandrists here. That would explain the frequency of stories with a detestably weak man.

A Randian relationship that will go who knows where.

“'Life with you is not going to be dull!'”

I am sure it will be very … interesting.

Whether it’s a good “interesting” or a cursed “interesting” or both is yet to be seen.

Awesome story. Well written. I can't find the words to describe how much I enjoyed reading it. This has got to be one of the top ten stories submitted. 5+stars

well played

Outstanding!!! After the usual crap in LW it's so nice to read such a well told and enjoyable story.

If only...

You write the most romantic fantasies, Freddie. Don't stop now, please.

Bryan’s really got a tiger by the tail with Becky. What a dynamic, almost incendiary personality she can be. What a bundle of contradictions. Feminist but fragile, indignant and combative, but with a capacity to be introspective and self-critical. What a well rendered multifaceted character you’ve created in Becky. I like Bryan too. He’s thoughtful and rational - the perfect pilot to man her helm in the stormy seas she seems to seek out. I hope you have more Becky and Bryan stories to tell. Thanks much.

"Becky felt something go 'click'."

And that was it. That was how I knew. This story is mechanical. Not analog, not digital. Cogged. At various stages, one can hear the gears grinding as the next paragraph is produced. Clichés, tropes, and stereotypes on an abacus. Filler, placeholder, tap dance.

That's something to be envious about. For the zillion of us out here who didn't get that spark. Great story.

She’s a liar, a cheat and a coward. “Getting what i want is more important than being good.”

She didn't lie to Daniel to spare him, she lied to spare herself and you want us to believe that Bryan is going to tame her? She doesn’t want to be tamed, she doesn’t feel guilt or empathy, she’s a sociopath, telling people what they want to hear because it lets her manipulate them.

She told Bryan the truth because she sees a successful man and she wants the good life, the easy life.

It’s easy to be faithful when you’re young, wealthy and attractive. It’s easy to pretend love when life is good. Love is proven in the hard times. It’s forged when everything is going wrong and you stick with a commitment.

Daniel treated her well, was respectful and on the second date, ditched him as soon as she fell in lust with Bryan and then lied to him so she had a fallback if Bryan rejected her.

This isn’t a love story, it’s about how to pretend to love someone.

wrong category

Just another back stabbing vile woman stepping on others without care

That was a very interesting story. I love the intensity of the relationship and found it fun to read. Nice to have a "real" loving wife.

Nicely written, a bit heavy on the cliches though.

Previously, I've expressed my QuickMagazine objections to FTC's "war between the sexes" (like with demander polyamory). But this, the 5th Becky & Bryan Sanford story, besides being a total 5, makes me think I've been mistaken. It's not any war between the sexes. It's the nature of their relationship, which Freddie describes with both realism and depth. Arguably never more so than here in "When Becky Met Bryan."

Plus it is nice to see a writer that does not delve into the overly dramatic

Very enjoyable!

5

Just read the previous “Anonymous” comments. Picks apart a delightful story. How sad! Most of these contributors are Not professional writers! SO WHAT ! Enjoy the story and appreciate the effort. I sure do. Good effort “Camel”! Thanks. Loved your story! Two tightly wound people forced to unwind and find true love. I love a happy ending!

Incredibly well-written, with an innovative plot. Great character descriptions and fantastic interior and exterior dialogue. Too many adjectives, but the hook, the sex, and the conversations of two unique individuals were of the best I've ever read. I like it because my relationship with my second wife was similar in many ways.

One of my favorite authors…but this one just fell flat. Bryan was a real twit…and Becky was a scheming harridan at heart.

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Just didn’t work for me.

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3 ***

More of a romance but really enjoyed it.

umm was this a romance? hmm think i missed something

FireFox59about 13 hours ago

Outstanding!!! After the usual crap in LW it's so nice to read such a well told and enjoyable story.

bc it usually in the romance cat

FtC dee-livers.... again. As usual!! Damn near perfect story. Nothing extraneous, nothing wasted, everything meshing perfectly. Never lagged, never dragged, always moved forward!!! 5++++++++++/5!!

5th story? You should give the readers a list so they can see what's what with these characters. Nothing in the prologue, nothing in in the story list that would give a clue.

Fantastic writing. Thank you for this.

I rarely give a story the "I Loved It" tag. To me, this one was exceptional. I Can't put my finger on it but this one kept me into the story. I love the concept of love at first sight. Great read.

Enderlocke posted the question, 'Um, was this a romance?'

No, this is a story of lust and infatuation, but no romance. Two self loving, plain speaking, self righteous kids who are full of themselves, have no chance at a real romance. This will burn out quickly, once the newness wears off. "Becky realized that she secretly despised men who believed her without question." The shallowness of this confession, along with her honestly stating that she was going after what she wanted, instead of trying to be good, just wrecked her for being any kind of a person who we would want to get acquainted with. That Bryan still did, was a testament to his own shallowness. But Frank- she was Beautiful! Don't care.

Writing talent- obvious. Story- disturbing.

You understand and express these characters flawlessly. I was a "victim" of love at first sight myself. The story hits the center of that bullseye.

I met her on November 30. I proposed on February 10. We were married in June. That was 37 years ago. So, yes, I loved this story.

Well done and thanks. Great writing and capture of emotions in a feel good story.

Great story.

5*****

She fucked him on the first night, and it was her idea. She is clearly more comfortable on her back than riding a bike. I give it two months tops before she's blowing his friends in the parking lot.

Is FTC putting the "liter" back into Literotica?"

I enjoyed this. Becky's narration wasn't exactly fair to Daniel, but that's to be expected. I think they both have a lot to learn, and there will be some pretty loud fireworks along the way, but I think they'll make it. Good story.

I found this to be a very well written love story. Perhaps a bit far fetched but certainly fun to read. Best for the future for your two love birds. Five *s.

I really enjoyed this story and its not that far fetched. My wife had a friend who met a guy, spent 3 days fucking in his hotel room and 20 years later they are still at it after 3 kids

While it was a fine and well written story, this is more for the Romance category as there was zero extra marital sea or swinging as this category states. I wish Literotica would change the name to avoid the confusion.

Hell yes! I loved it. Excellent, loved the characters. No need for more talk. Some story to wash my eyes from the mass of cuck drivel here. Once now and there to pic a good one like yours.

Five, mon.

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Thank you. Well written. Should it have been in the Romance category? Perhaps. But, it worked in the LW.

Loved it, need a follow-up just to show how happy they are with their life choice

This was an exceptionally easy 5 Star vote!

Of course if the Honeymoon is real, they will look like what they really are, in love, in respect, in commitment. My wife and I ran out of a diner one morning laughing and holding hands; I don't know why we were laughing. As we ran toward our car two older men were walking toward the diner and one exclaimed with this smile of wonder on his face as he pointed at us to his friend, "Look, newlyweds!" At that time we had been married for about 3 years. That was 41 years ago. Next year will be our 45th.

But this story is all conjecture and emotion and fucking fantastic fucking. And that's OK, its a fuck story on a fuck website. Maybe you'll write a sequel that actually belongs in the Loving Wives category. One that includes diapers full of shit, waistlines overflowing belts, finances threatening dreams, naive promises broken, communications inadequate or misunderstood. The wedding is almost always fun. Its the marriage that tells the tale. Maybe someday you'll tell theirs. That will be the story worth reading, and writing. Thanks for the effort.

Wait till the honeymoon is over. 5 stars, not much to say, love is wonderful and sex is over rated but nice while it lasts.

Outstanding story Fred. I really enjoyed it.

Excellent, loved it. It’s exactly the right length, ending at the perfect point.

The first anonny accused our Freddie of being a misogynist, and the fourth anonny said he (Freddie) doesn't know what feminism is. I doubt that these two unnamed folk are up to it, but I'd like to see some widely accepted definitions of misogyny and feminism (that aren't simple and therefore simply wrong).

To all: this site must be 90% assnomeous.

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

The Becky and Bryan Sandford series (listed below in the sequence that they should be read) is an erotic saga of a young middle class married couple in middle England. I loved the writing, the plots and the character development. The Audrey chapters were very hot. 5 stars for all chapters and added to my favourites and thanks for sharing.

1. When Becky Met Bryan

2. The Driving Issue

3. The Bedside Lamp

4. The Domestic Equality War (2 chapters)

5. The Happiness Competition

6. February Sucks in Britain

7. To Love, Honour... and Obey

8. The Confession

9. Audrey (4 chapters)

Enjoyed this, will have to read more of the story. Thanks for your writing.