All Comments on 'Whirlwind 01 - Finish Line - Pt. 01'

Slow, but promising story! Should be several installations long at this speed ;-)

Great start and I am hooked. Keep it coming along.

Either the speader has a speech difficulty or the author doesn't know how to spell.

Interesting and mostly successful attempt to convey the Irish version O' english. Sometimes slows the reading but not too hard to pick up the meaning. Enjoy following the story.

Outstanding and engaging story. I thought you accomplished your goal with the dialogue very well!

To Anonymous #3. My apologies, it wasn't very prominent, but I did note at the beginning that I was attempting to phonetically mimic the Irish accents of some of the characters. I presume that is what you were referring to about the difficulty reading and my spelling. If it distracts too many people, I may try posting the 'English Only' version. Thank you for the feedback.

With an 818 number Zoe must be a Valley Girl!

Ariana wouldn't teach him Gaelic, in Ireland it's emphatically Irish. I made that mistake once.

This might be a good story but I quit after the first page. It was too burdensome to read in a cohesive manner.

Yes, I did read the initial disclaimer about trying to mimic the accents but it’s just not my cup of tea.