All Comments on 'Whores in My Bedroom'

This is one of the hottest stories on the site. i read it beginning to end because i couldn't wait to see what happened next. i just wish my sister was like his.

That story was UNBELIEVABLE!!! If I had a sister & wife like that... I would never leave the house....

This is one of the best story that i have ever read.

Excellent story development with enough details to sustain my hard on throughout th story!

Excellent! I wis i had a sis and wif elike this. It kept me hard and and the sex scenes were graphic and long. Best story i read. Straight, lesbian and incest! What more could u want!?

Simply an excellent story line !!!!!!!! **** S

...but SO MANY spelling and grammatical errors that it was a waste of time to read.

For example, "...Nikki and Nikki were finished with each other. So they drew their attention towards me."

Nikki and Nikki were finished with each other? HA HA HA

Leave writing to writers.

One of the best stories I have ever read.

I found myself getting very jealous of Tim.

I have been searching for a story line like this. The man I am dating seems to have an unusually close relationship with his sister, and I have been trying to figure out how to handle it. I must admit, it would really turn me on to watch them fuck. I wonder why there aren't more stories like this.

This is another old story that I have read before, but I did enjoy it (well, aside from the fact that he is kind of a pushover with his wife at first). True, it is a LONG story (7 Lit pages), but it is filled with all kinds of nasty, smutty fun. Cheating, incest, bisexuality, group marriage- can it get much better? Only if you had Male Dom, and that's about it. I truly enjoyed it and found it a turn-on. Yes, there are some mistakes in the story, but they are not enough to undo the basic sexiness of it. I give it a 5.

but not bad either. I'd give it a 2.5 if I could. Story with great potential but hubby's to much of a pussy. The gramatical errors and poor sentance structure also take away from the story. What a pussy whipped asshole hubby is, he catches his wife cheating and is ok with it? Goes out and masturbates in the car??? Shit if he had any balls he'd have grabbed his slut wife by the hair, dragged her off his slut of a sister and stuck it in. If he didn't want to do his sister he could have picked some chick out of a bar and done her. Only a whimp would let his wife get some strange while he jerks off in the car. the only reason he got any was because wife and sister let him in. Pussy whipped whimp. Could have been much better, great concept, poorly executed

I'm sure you won't be flattened by what I have to say although apparently you've seen lots of flat navals. You are the absolute goddamn fucking worst writer—and it's not just the spelling—I've ever tried to read. Terrible! Don't you have a mommy or a real sister or an educated fuck buddy who could glance over your crap and make it at least only half as bad as it is?

It's clear that English is not your native language but why take it out on us?

Elisa in Seattle.

ignore the other reviewer, whilst gramma is not the strongest here, and you probably should get someone to help you with that from here. The story was okay, so thanks for your contribution.

I loved it personally, had me hard from page 2 on. Wish I had a sister like that.

Story line itself and pace were good. I can usually let pass minor misused words etc, but felt the need to comment. Keep up the writing, but please find an editor or reread before submitting again. Just a little constructive criticism.

THE PREMISE OF THE STORY IS GOOD, AND WHILE THE CHARACTERS OF THE STORY HAVE AMERICAN NAMES, THE WRITER IS NOT AMERICAN. HE DOESN'T ACT, SPEAK, OR HAVE THE MINDSET OF AN REDBLOODED AMERICAN MAN. TOO BAD, BECAUSE THIS GUY WAS VERY CLUMSY, DIDN'T KNOW WHAT HE HAD, WITH TWO BEAUTIFUL WOMEN, READY TO FUCK, EACH OTHER AND HIM. OH, WELL,

This story has every element of a great, erotic story. But, you should have someone proofread your work. It would read so much better. And, the reader wouldn't have to pause so often. Other than that....the women in this story are smoking hot.

Basically a good story but the writing is in desperate need of editing (proof reading). Also, by your sentence structure and word choice (arse) I strongly suspect that the Kings English is not you primary language . . . .