All Comments on 'Widening the Circle Ch. 05'

Women don't come so fast, you need to do some research. The average woman takes 7 minutes and the guy 3 minutes to come the first time. Granted, that is an average, and yes men can stay hard seemingly forever, some men. But the feeling that a woman has is different, some never come, and some just come once and then enjoy for hours if it goes on that long. Women don't need to come to feel satisfied, the act of intimacy is enough, most women.

This section has turned into body mechanics, there is no difference between the characters. How can the reader connect if you only describe the physical aspects. Sex is 90 mental, you need to write three times as much to give each charcter motivation and allow the reader to identify with them.