All Comments on 'Wife Tammy Ch. 02'

Pick a person you, she, her and stick with it. Amateurish.

The story didn't flow as well as the first one.

Disappointing.

the story line went from the person "she" to "you"

POV and first or third person seem to float a lot. Sounds nit picky but anything that pulls the reader away from the image he or she is forming in his head is bad.

It is too much work to write a story and damage it with this kind of error.

Sounds like there are some good stories in that head.

Thank you.

The Wife Tammy series is really good, with some great sex scenes and it does a good job of showing her transformation. The story works much better in third person, though, as the later parts illustrate.

Better in third person.

After he leaves, she should go naked to the window and call Jimmy in for some more hot fun!