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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
POV Improvement

I can tell you want to write a detailed and fun story. But watch your POV as you sometimes are talking to your readers and other times to your wife, even in the same sentence. It is confusing and distracting from my enjoyment. Good work, just improve that one issue. Thanks.

rodryder44rodryder44over 3 years ago

I hope you and her have a long conversation about who is directing your next story.

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My wife made the profile name so don’t blame me. Overly horny dad who likes to write stories on occasion.

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